|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Its Hard
Contributed by
Noelia
on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 08:31:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
|
Its hard to pretend like everythings ok when parents are fighting,
Its hard to ignore all the shouting.
Its hard when you get your feelings hurt,
Its hard when people treat you like dirt.
Its hard when you have nowhere to go,
Its hard to remember you had a home when it was so long ago.
Its hard to let go of someone you love,
Its hard when someone goes up above.
Its hard to say good-bye,
Its hard not to cry.
Its hard to stop tears,
Its hard to confront your fears.
Its hard to pretend like nothings wrong,
Its hard to smile behind a frown.
Its hard when you have nobody to care,
Its hard when your alone and have so many smiles to share.
Its hard to feel safe in this world,
Its hard to be nice when everybody is so cruel.
Its hard to be happy when theirs people crying,
Its hard to laugh when theirs people dying.
Copyright ©
Noelia
... [
2005-07-30 20:31:02]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Its Hard
(User Rating: 1 )
by Alibi on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:19:35 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
The "It's hard" repetition is a little hard on the ol' eyes! Also most lines start off "It's hard to" except for six which begin "It's hard when" something doesn't mix too well. For this being a rhyming poem I was thrown off by these lines ending with literally no "Rhyme" or reason:)
Fighting/Shouting, Wrong/Frown, World/Cruel
and "Go" and "Ago" not so creative. Keep working on your poetry, so you can master your skills.
|
|
|
Re: Its Hard
(User Rating: 1 )
by poet70 on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 06:00:48 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I can see where you was going in this poem, the emoitions and feelings and everything, but the repeats in the beginning is just boring. I feel you surly are a better writer then what this peice shows. So just work harder on not repeating so much, it doesn't seem to work for us readers, it didn't for me any ways. ( SORRY)! Don't want to make you mad, just trying to help |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Site Help
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
