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Path to Suppression
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 09:34:31 PM in AEST
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The rope has been dropped down
but you have failed to climb
Metaphoric S.O.S cast into the sea
a prize has been issued that nobody will collect
Flashlight shone in that cold, dark place
But no one was home to see
Prayers have been answered
for the tears that wept
Long after the last had fallen
He was sought in the middle of the night
although the voice failed to penetrate his ears
Words penned so carefully, sealed
mailed it off to the wrong address
A phone call to speak unspoken
Hello, static, then a disconnect
Answers spilling out with emotion
to questions that now cease to matter
The most fantastic red burst of a sunrise
but alas, it was really a sunset...
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-07-30 21:34:31]
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 10:09:16 PM AEST
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Nice imagery! It brought the emotion to life on the page. Quite well done.
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Lancaster on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 11:12:35 PM AEST
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scorp, this was an intense type of writing, i thought i understood it, but it seems there is alot hidden in this write, you sound dissapinted as if you have been duped...but that dosent sound like you at all...so im lost...
nice write scorp |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 11:16:45 PM AEST
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| well, well, well. nice transition to freestyle you have been making recently, i believe. i liked the irony at the end. this reminded me of one of jarreds poems actually. ::wide eyes:: ::keeps rereading the poem:: |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 11:43:26 PM AEST
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| I think someone will gladly take that prize someday. Very well done. :) |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 12:07:14 AM AEST
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I'm not sure I really understood any meaning, but the images you created for me were wonderful. It looks and sounds well when read. I think I enjoyed it.
Love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 12:29:35 AM AEST
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Goosebump sad Scorp..
very moving:
"Prayers have been answered
for the tears that wept
Long after the last had fallen"
also, it's so refreshing to see some work
that doesn't have the first letter of every line
capitalized.. (an outdated and frowned upon manner of composition among prolific, present day writers)
which you are Scorp..a prolific writer..
As Always..
Billy
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 12:53:08 AM AEST
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Astounding piece.
This one's a keeper.
Well done.
*claps* |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:03:02 AM AEST
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| i had to read this poem a couple of times, thought i still cant grasp its meaning completly. seems personal. anyways i thought what you did here was great. the irony,the imagery,tthe suspense to get to the end, only to have to read over again, and thats great! you make the reader think,wonder, question. and thats what writings should do. great job. |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:31:02 AM AEST
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This poem is unsettling cause it so true, as i read it i realized how easy it could be applied
to certain scenaros on this site, right on traget scorp . . .
Ben |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:31:07 AM AEST
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Someday your special Mr. Right will come along. I have found that when we quit looking and just let the Universal spirits do their work we end up with the best of the best. This is a lovely piece of work, Scorpapita. I am sorry if you are sad at the moment, but we are learning from each heartache to be stronger and wiser.
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Alibi on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:07:14 AM AEST
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| I found this to be deceitfully vague until I read it a second time and searched the words a little. Then it opened right up, and I believe you are speaking of a love interest, or perhaps a past love who isn't reciprocating your affections. Or is maybe being misleading in their intentions. I hope I'm not being too bold in my speculations. Theorizing aside, I enjoyed this immensely! I thought this was creative with the wording and metaphors, and the irony at the end spoke volumes. Keep writing, this was delightfully intriguing! |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:26:41 AM AEST
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Dear Scorp,
I read this one with an open mind Scorp, but I'm afraid I didn't quite get your scope? I know the poem is created with sadness and tears, and for that I'm so sorry. If you have lost someone that you love, or perhaps he's just be misplaced, I hope you will find him soon, if that be your wish.
Warm love
consue |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Eclipse on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 06:55:02 AM AEST
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beautiful. i loved the line 'a phone call to speak unspoken'
keep it up
luv eclipse xxx |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Willofree on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 11:36:30 AM AEST
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This poem is quite abstract, which I like, but that leaves the write open to various interpretations; and I'm not sure I understood it completely. It does, to me, seem like the poem deals with missed opportunity for love. Like these two people keep missing making a connection; or loosing each other and they cannot find each other?
Very impressive, Scorp
Will |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 03:52:35 AM AEST
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| wow good write scorppy. |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 01:43:49 PM AEST
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Very fine writing.. i've noticed too that the style you write in has changed a bit.... to a much more introspective and enigmatic side. But, it's all good and very much welcome!
take care scorp
dwayne |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 03:03:40 AM AEST
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My friend u write with such sadness and deep emotion. U captivate the reader leaving them guessing on what u r really talking about in ur poem. I feel sadness and pain in ur heart my dear friend. I hope that all is well with u. Otherwise an outstanding very well penned piece of poetry.
May the rays of happiness shine through ur heart my friend.
Hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: Path to Suppression
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 08:21:33 PM AEST
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Great poem
and even better to read
you have such ingenuity
and clever style
sounds like im kissing butt
But no you just float my poetic boat lol |
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