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a thousand sorrows
Contributed by
priss
on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:08:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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these bitter whispers must stop
i wish i could scream
how i feel, how i felt,
how i ache,
how my hands shake,
the smiles that i fake,
how difficult it is to make
it, barely make it through
the day.
a thousand sorrows hide
behind this smile.
but you don't know, don't care
you don't see the incessant tears,
hear the banging in my ears,
fight off my compounding fears,
or realize how near
i am to surrendering.
i shouldn't be afraid
but i am,
of you, of this world,
i feel so displaced
might not, if i had a prettier face,
my love's gone to waste,
wish i knew the meaning of grace
and how to get there.
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priss
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2005-07-31 14:08:10]
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Re: a thousand sorrows
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by Saint_41 on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:23:05 PM AEST
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| i really like this one. good write |
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Re: a thousand sorrows
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by sek-c-shaun on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 03:46:19 PM AEST
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| this is a great write....lots of deep thoughts put into it |
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Re: a thousand sorrows
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by Dusty on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 04:06:28 PM AEST
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I really, really likes this one, it is less traditional in the way it was written. It was also very interesting. I enjoyed reading it!
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Re: a thousand sorrows
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by vibes2go on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 06:52:21 PM AEST
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| This was really great .. thanks. |
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Re: a thousand sorrows
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by Spike on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 06:53:03 AM AEST
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Priss, I needed to read this one a few times to get the meter and rhythm right in my head and heart, but once I "heard" it being read aloud it all clicked into place. The angst and heartache of this piece is mine as much as yours - it is exactly how I've been feeling, off and on, for some time.
So, great poem, good construction, reads aloud even better than it is on the page, cuts through my heart like a bandsaw. That's why it is 5 out of 5.
Spike |
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