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raging words
Contributed by
suicidal_imbecile
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Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 06:44:02 PM in AEST
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Can you see me?
Im reaching out towards you.
Can you hear me?
I scream in my sleep.
Do you love me?
Of course not, you ignore the pain I feel
You can't stand the thought of it.
Its black, its thick
It will kill
Suicide kills my friend
I swear to God it does
No thank the lord it does
Those who are like me have hope.
We have something to look forward to.
Death
Its like being awaken from a nightmare
Relief
Take me away in your arms angel of death
Kate Ecklund
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Re: raging words
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by Naughtygurl on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 08:11:08 PM AEST
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| wow thats really sad .... i liked it though but it makes so much sense |
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Re: raging words
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by vibes2go on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 11:10:10 PM AEST
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| I felt your pain .. |
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Re: raging words
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by Kitty06 on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 11:56:57 PM AEST
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| This truly is a rant. It doesn't really have a poetic rhythm to it, and it doesn't rhyme much either. And yet I think if this poem did have those things it would take away from the overwhelming anger and bitterness expressed here. Especially the lines 'Do you love me? Of course not, you ignore the pain I feel' Excellent work, the world can be an angry place, so why not let it out? |
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Re: raging words
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by poisonpen00ad on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 01:50:02 AM AEST
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| Great write. It does not need to rhyme to have power and poetic quality. Emotion speaks volumes as you have here. |
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Re: raging words
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 07:41:11 PM AEST
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| very sad indeed. kind of hopeless. oyu did a good job writing it though |
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Re: raging words
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by sride686 on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:52:13 PM AEST
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| well Kate sorry i didn't read this much sooner and i wish i had its just been so busy over here in Iraq. it was a amazing write that really makes me think. it makes me think that there is some one else who has thoughts like mine. the last 6 lines really hit hard and made a great ending to a powerful write. i hope everything with you is going okay and thank you for your comment on my write. take care Kate and i'll talk to you later....Steve |
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Re: raging words
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 02:54:49 PM AEST
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this was so sad and i can totally relate.. great write..
christina |
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