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To Andrew
Contributed by
xthrewmyluvawayx
on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 01:43:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You were my best friend,
but that something was lost.
there is so much more,
for me pain is the cost.
I try to look at it,
as your loss not mine,
but I'm tired of pretending,
that I will be fine.
I can't stand the thought,
of never being your friend,
But I need to realize,
that this is the end.
We're never going to be friends again,
everything between us is gone,
you just forgot about it,
but I still need to move on.
You say you still want to be friends,
but you can't even look at me,
Isn't it so obvious,
that friends we'll never be.
It seems that you don't even care,
that you're treating me like dirt,
You know I've gone through enough,
In my life I don't need another jerk.
You remind me a lot of someone,
that someone is my dad,
Someone killing me inside and not caring at all,
Yeah, it's freaking sad!
You know at church when we talk,
it bugs the crap out of me- you see
do you not remember,
you're the one who walked away from me.
It's hard to write a poem about you,
with trying to act like it doesn't hurt,
but for me to not care about this,
isn't how it's going to work.
I think of all the good times,
and the times we could have had,
Why'd you stop talking to me
what did I do so bad?
I still love you and always will,
but you hurt me so much,
I'm a very fragile sensitive girl,
even with the softest touch.
Copyright ©
xthrewmyluvawayx
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2005-08-02 13:43:01]
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Re: To Andrew
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by Alibi on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 02:47:16 PM AEST
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| I hope things work out for you and your friend. Nice sentiments in this poem, and good expression of your feelings. |
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Re: To Andrew
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by all_that_i_can_be on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 02:48:30 PM AEST
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| i think this is one of my favorite poems ive read on this site so far. i recently lost my best friend, and well its a hard emotion to capture in words. great job. amazing poem. |
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Re: To Andrew
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 05:32:40 PM AEST
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I like the way you expressed your emotions in this piece...I could feel your disappointment and sadness regarding the situation. The on/off rhyme scheme worked for this write as well. I will suggest to maybe ease off a bit with some of the punctuation though. Commas are not needed at the end of every line, and periods are unnecessary in poetry for the most part...Just a thought, but this was enjoyable to read nonetheless.
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Re: To Andrew
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by gwenevere on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 06:02:46 PM AEST
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| It's very often hard to put such raw feelings into words.Have you thought that he is probably hurting as much as you but can't find the words to say so.Perhaps you should try to talk.It may be worht the effort in the end.Good poem, Ros |
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