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Grit
Contributed by
Vampire_Slander
on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 08:45:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Be my speed
endeavor failing
mazes clash
lunatic profusion
infinity meditation
series,chain and standstill
shock in delusions
shouting mind
drought forbears
convert walls
towing jewels
shine illuminates
feathered sky
a blooming tempest
black and shade
mists overthrow
natural occurrences
this cycle shakes
winding paths
this balance.
Copyright ©
Vampire_Slander
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2005-08-03 20:45:27]
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Re: Grit
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 09:25:11 PM AEST
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| I can't say I understood it .. but I read it .. does that count at all? |
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Re: Grit
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by Stew on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 09:35:11 PM AEST
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I love the words you used...they were very vibrant. thanks for sharing it with me.
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Re: Grit
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by poisonpen00ad on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 09:54:47 PM AEST
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I didn't understand it either, maybe u should expand just a litte....but then again what do I know.......thank you for it though
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Re: Grit
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by Sad-one on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 10:09:10 PM AEST
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This was kinda good. Intresting rhyme scheme, but really good.Full emotion.
PM me anytime.
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Re: Grit
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 01:31:17 AM AEST
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I would like it better if the images were framed by a more unified voice through the lines and stanzas, as it is they feel somewhat disjointed. But it is good work, the images are well-portrayed, and I like the theme. Good work.
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