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Ode to Love
Contributed by
mckayla
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Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 11:41:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I can feel love, a dancing siloette untame untouched and unfamiliar i can hear love voice love breath love love keeps me I can not keep love It is free firey forgiving Love is patient excepting powerful It runs through me all mighty in controll I taste love soothing breathtaking spicy love cures me, aches me , soothes me I live for love haunting mesmerizing hipnotic take controll of me feed me sing to me i fear you comfort me I will dance with you ode to love
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mckayla
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2005-08-03 23:41:37] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Ode to Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by EricBRamey on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 11:51:54 PM AEST (User
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Nice work...at first glance your poem appears trite...but after reading it...it makes sense and it all comes together. How on earth could we live, if we don't dance passionately with love. Very nice work mckayla...Eric |
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Re: Ode to Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 01:15:44 AM AEST (User
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Not bad, not bad. The language is good, and with practice I sense it will get even better.
There are some spelling errors. Maybe find a proofreader? Do keep it up, though.
Andrew |
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