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Trial By Time
Contributed by
rockergirl94
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Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:15:18 AM in AEST
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This hot blanket of regret
Is smothering me
And Im tangled in the covers
So that I cannot break free
Strangled in the covers
My actions cast shadows over me.
Chained to the present
Cant rewrite scripts of long past days
As I search for doors gone by
My diary fills with many a blank page.
And if by chance I choose to write
Two words devour the pages
I regret.
I regret.
Ignored mistakes lead to strong cages.
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rockergirl94
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2005-08-05 01:15:18]
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Re: Trial By Time
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by emystar on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:23:48 AM AEST
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Very creative, thought provoking write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Trial By Time
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 02:03:51 AM AEST
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People, no doubt, will say things like:
"good write"
"hugs to you"
and..
"deep thoughts"
but I really liked it:
"Chained to the present
Can’t rewrite scripts of long past days
As I search for doors gone by"
and...
"Two words devour the pages
“I regret.”
“I regret.”
Ignored mistakes lead to strong cages."
..It's full fledged pain-
magnificent I say..
very well written-
I really liked this.. infact, I'm off to read it again!!
*Sincerely*
Billy
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Re: Trial By Time
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 04:28:01 AM AEST
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wow, this is an AMAZING write!
well done |
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Re: Trial By Time
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by Zandria on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 08:00:16 AM AEST
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Excellent Well!
This truely spoke to me.
Some of us have regrets of different sizes/importance, this seemed to speak volumes of the bigger type.
Great write. |
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Re: Trial By Time
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 10:05:36 PM AEST
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| Well, I enjoyed the first stanza, I like the line about being tangled in the covers. We think on a similar note. I wrote a poem called "I'm Depressed" My first stanza is "this depression lays heavy, like a blanket over me, caught in the covers, I can't get free" Cool huh. Great minds think alike. LOL peace to you, Laura |
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