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drunken thoughts
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 05:10:28 AM in AEST
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another year another way
thirty one to count the day
another mile a soul to pay
another way to go my way
done in sin they way i stay
another word for the games i play
down in the pit my deed i pay
lost in this world this line i stray
long list of rhyming lines
words that slip like my mind
towers that crumbe line after time
walking threw this nightmare of crime
bleeding system a rotten part
the one that will bring you world apart
why is it that only some of the blind can see
this isnt the world we want it to be
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lostrelic
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2005-08-06 05:10:28]
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Re: drunken thoughts
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by emystar on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 05:27:57 AM AEST
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Well I would have known u were drinking if it weren't for the title.
Very touching write andd happy, happy birthday again.
huggs, smiles,
emy
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Re: drunken thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 12:49:27 PM AEST
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| Excellent poem, I loved it, that is really what you think about huh, sounds like a whole different world, I loved ending it was the best. SLipSiX. |
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Re: drunken thoughts
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 01:23:59 AM AEST
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Not bad, not at all bad. I like the question of the end.
Andrew |
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