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suicide
Contributed by
mjh0813
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Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 11:59:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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she comes home from school
her mother sleeping on the couch, sick again
she covers her up and peeks in her parents bedroom
her father passed out on the bed, drunk again
she goes to the bathroom and grabs a razor
she goes to her room and shuts the door
as she holds the blade to her skin she begins to cry
she presses down and slices
as it starts to bleed she cries more
she pauses
blood dripping on the floor
she starts to feel dizzy and sits down
she pushes the blade down harder and slices deeper
when she stops she looks around her
bloods all over...
she did it
the bleeding gets worse and wont stop
she's crying harder and shes shaking
she starts to lay down
while shes on her back she stares at the ceiling and hums
she starts to fade away
nothing can save her
now she's gone
nobody understands why as they all begin to cry
they thought she was happy
it's too late now
another teen has committed suicide
because no one realized how much she cried,
and didnt care what she felt inside
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mjh0813
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2005-08-16 23:59:24]
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Re: suicide
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 12:11:55 AM AEST
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hey lil sis,
great poem. you did a great job. hope things are going ok at home. love you lots and miss you bunches.
peace out.
love always,
your big sis |
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Re: suicide
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 12:16:54 AM AEST
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Wow great write so dark... gave me chills
I just pray its fiction..
Keep writing..hugggggggs
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: suicide
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 01:08:25 AM AEST
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So sad but unfotunatly this happens alot. I'm glad u said, keep in mind this was six years ago.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: suicide
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 01:14:52 AM AEST
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| Great write, truthful, no one ever realizes what lies behind what most teens think about, a lot of people are afraid to show there emoticon and feelings and it ends like that. good job keep up the good work. |
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Re: suicide
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 02:07:20 AM AEST
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| Very strong and dark. Hope everything gets better good luck |
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