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When you can't think of where to be
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 12:39:22 AM in AEST
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How could I have changed it
To see things as I had
I should have been much wiser
And realize I can never have
What it is Im looking for
What fuels my hearts fire
So I must view from afar
Forced only to admire
The light you shine is different
Your caring is from the heart
You bring me up in trying times
And lead me through the dark
Your silken skin and taunting lips
Make life so hard for me
For as much as I long for you
I know it will never be
We lead such different lives
Yet I know you know im there
Waiting for you to return to me
When you need someone to care
I wish that things were different,
I wish you thought of me
I wish that you were in my arms
When you cant think of where to be...
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Re: When you can't think of where to be
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 01:04:11 AM AEST
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wonderfully written very powerful. I can relate . I love the last couple of lines i think those are the most powerful starting with.
"Yet I know you see me there........When you can't think of where to be."
You get 5stars plus 5 more even if its a little sad :(
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Re: When you can't think of where to be
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by Pyrofungus on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 01:24:12 AM AEST
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awesome bro.......wow...sad
please comment on my work too
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Re: When you can't think of where to be
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 08:59:23 AM AEST
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ahhhh beautful write....I can relate very much to the hopeless feeling of knowing you cant have someone...its absolute torture.....
i loved this, so emotional and your words did touch my heart.......well done.....
i hope this person opens their eyes and turns to you in the end! |
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Re: When you can't think of where to be
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 05:34:47 PM AEST
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Lots of anguish in your words, and I like the kind of staccato flow it had to it...Very nice.
This part stood out for me:
"What is it I'm looking for
What fuels my hearts fire
So I must view from afar
Forced only to admire..."
Keep it up!!
Scorp. |
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