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Hiding Myself
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 12:50:20 PM in AEST
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Acting like everything is all right
Acting like all I see is the light
When in reality all I see is black
And I cant seem to find the track
Im smiling on the outside
But frowning on the inside
I look positive to you all
So you wont see me when I fall
I dont let anyone see the true me
Because if you did, you all would flee
So while you all see this grin,
Im really struggling just to win
What you all see is really false
You dont know of my pulse
Which starts beating real slow
Because I really just want to go
Dont want to live anymore
Just want to give up the war
So what I show you all is a fake I
So you wont know when I say, bye
Just so you wont have to see,
I am hiding the true me
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Re: Hiding Myself
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by pixie on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 01:02:49 PM AEST
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well expressed, I think that we all hide parts of ourselves at one time or another throughout our lives, I know I have done and still do to a certain extent, well written,
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Re: Hiding Myself
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by colinbaker62 on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 02:26:58 PM AEST
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Hey sprinter, there is only one thing worse than being candid, and that is not being candid. So say all of us. I think this is a very well expressed poem. Keep writing for it must indirectly offer up some therapeutic benefit. I know it does for me, even if it just makes me hurl the pen with rage across the room !
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Re: Hiding Myself
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by Inevitable on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 03:32:15 PM AEST
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| Wow this is good I really like it. |
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Re: Hiding Myself
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 03:10:15 PM AEST
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| Great write. I can really relate. Powerful. keep up the great work. xx |
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Re: Hiding Myself
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by Bones on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 07:30:40 PM AEST
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I agree, well expressed. You always seems to have a way to get your emotion across in very good detail. That's one reason why I love reading your poems. The mixture of emotions and the mind of the adolesence is always complicated. You show your emotions the best way I've seen.
Peace,
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