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Night Sky
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 09:41:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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As I look at the night sky
I mutter a soft goodbye
Im standing by my pond
I have my magical wand,
My hand is cradling the pistol
As I say bye to all this bull
Im gripping the handle tightly,
My finger on the trigger lightly,
I place the pistol to my head,
I prepare to fall into my grass bed
The quiet is disturbed by the loud blast
Unlike me, the echo of the shot lasts
I look up through my bloody eyes
And say goodbye to the red night sky
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Re: Night Sky
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 10:27:23 PM AEST
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| short and potent. i hope you find the strength to make it through. |
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Re: Night Sky
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 05:01:35 AM AEST
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nice poem, it has a good flow
always here if you need to talk, megs xXx |
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Re: Night Sky
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by guiltycircles on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 06:30:14 AM AEST
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| this is bloody awesome!!!!!!!! uve put my dreams into words, well done |
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Re: Night Sky
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 11:53:33 AM AEST
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Chilling write...Subject aside, the rhyming and flow were really good, and the emotions were strong, but delivered in an almost eerie, delicate touch...I do enjoy your writes; even your suicidal ones : O
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Re: Night Sky
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by Bones on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 07:39:05 PM AEST
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Yes, short, but good. In a sense, that is. Suicide is never the answer. No matter what goes on...there's always a better way, you just have to be willing to look deeper. Look past the chains and people, you must look deeper in yourself. But who cares, philosphy is almost overrated...I seem to use it too much.
Peace,
Agent Bones
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Never Let It GO |
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