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Constancy
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:14:17 AM in AEST
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Shadows linger of our separate yesterdays..
blurring with menace, our present light,
casting false, the aura of other ancient colors
between the bright, tenacious passion that binds us..
unbreakable now and for the unguessable future.
There are no more subtle ways I can speak to you-
save in halting verse like now..
and begging your charity.
Often lost in a freedom of thought
or more stranded, still with near rapture;
this then, is my latter choice.
More remote than star from star,
likewise are we sometimes within a byte or ram,
each captive of days passed-
stretching a silence once treasured
beyond the faint felicity of touch,,
a cold place between us no words can fill.
Hope and fear hover
in our merest response-
yet, however unknown our tomorrow,
the truth remains:
love is by far more constant than lovers are.
Between uncertainity and dreams,
persists the harrowing possibility of failure;
'tween hopeless tenderness
and unutterable dread,
the twisted knife of rational resignation
to what neither of us will permit in the other remains.
Our everyday burdens us with promise or threat...
still, between the endearment and curse,
love remains by far more constant than lovers are.
Shadows linger,
blinding clear perception
of the true and lasting that would be
in each other...
making all more doomed, the escape
into lucid and poignant latitudes..
More than a shadow's journey from the other,
is immensity, more than I can contemplate...
love remains by far more constant than lovers are.
Hope and a gradual peace
to bring understanding
is my only prayer for the unseeable future;
that better times are not easily put aside
so as to allow the underrated things in our lives
to speak with greater and gentler command
than passing wrath.
M.O.H.
We've known each other in ways wilful and insignificant
yet, Love remains by far..
more constant than lovers are.
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Man_On_High
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Re: Constancy
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:37:34 AM AEST
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If we clearly speak love, instead of dancing around it, then would it not take on a solid form? If we work at love to ensure its foundation, would it not stay constantly steady? If we choose to fight our battles better, would the lover's not be as constant as the love? Beautiful expressions, Billy.
Smiles,
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Re: Constancy
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 03:04:37 AM AEST
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"More remote than star from star,
likewise are we sometimes within a byte or ram,
each captive of days passed-
stretching a silence once treasured
beyond the faint felicity of touch,,
a cold place between us no words can fill.
Hope and fear hover
in our merest response-
yet, however unknown our tomorrow,
the truth remains:"
A truly magnificent piece.... Well done!!
Jenni
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Re: Constancy
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by Jane_Doe on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 04:07:07 AM AEST
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I don't know how one could possibly expect anything less than a poem that is absolutely gorgeous from you. There was so much feeling in this poem. Awful feelings that dragged out such sadness and beautiful feelings that coaxed out lovely thoughts. It was beyond wonderful and the message was so clearly written:
"love remains by far more constant than lovers are"
Such depressing yet true words.
If you happen to hear applause it's me (though you may actually be going a bit mad). Bravo! Breath-taking write! |
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Re: Constancy
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by Archie on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 10:03:01 AM AEST
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| Yes I must agree. I think your write is deep and true. You have captured something in your poem that few do. |
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Re: Constancy
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by brew on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 10:09:12 AM AEST
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The aveance here, is so incediable. The lonely, feelings which are taking in, and pulled out with thoughts of happiness........even if there is seperation of the two. Distance , that consist of miles, make it seem far.............yet in the greater , its actually close.!
Beautiful, stunning write, this is.! Always, to see what one can create, and bring to life.
Brew~ |
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Re: Constancy
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:27:07 PM AEST
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A great understanding going on here Bill i hope some of these thigs come through 4 the sake of us all, love the last verse especially, saturated with wisdom . . .
Ben |
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Re: Constancy
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:06:15 PM AEST
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Billy, this is one of your best...A deeply moving and introspective write that will stand the test of time.
I like the repeated line throughout, and your use of italics in all the appropriate places.
That better times are not easily put aside
so as to allow the underrated things in our lives
to speak with greater and gentler command
than passing wrath
Very well done!
Scorp. |
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Re: Constancy
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 11:20:56 PM AEST
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Billy
This is a masterpiece!! So insightful and beautifully penned, let me know when you publish your book!!!
Leia36 |
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Re: Constancy
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 28th August 2005 @ 01:49:34 AM AEST
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Powerfully and dramatically stated, and a gripping read. I am quite fond of repetition when properly done, and I liked it in this piece. Your lines are also deep and rich, requiring the full attention of the reader, as should be. Well done! One of your most broadly-encompassing to date, mayhap.
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Re: Constancy
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th August 2005 @ 08:00:37 AM AEST
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| This poem envokes a lot of imagery and emotion; it seems a masterwork of expression. Phrasing such as "More remote than star from star," "the twisted knife of rational resignation," "More than a shadow's journey from the other," -- well, the phrasing of the poem is very much filled with clear and fresh word pictures. Really a marvelous read. |
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Re: Constancy
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 10:05:05 PM AEST
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Moving and brilliant thoughts....I have to say I agree...
Again your timeless words illuminate wisdom......please dont ever stop writing my dear friend. |
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Re: Constancy
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 01:30:37 AM AEST
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A true emotional yet beautiful masterpiece written by an amazing talented poet. Billy this is outstanding and brillant. It's an emotional sad piece yet u bring the beauty of it out with ur words. Simply in a league of ur own. I bow down gracefully to u.
Hugs from ur devoted fan,
Sue, Dreamer |
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Re: Constancy
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th June 2006 @ 01:44:35 PM AEST
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Dearest Billy~
Whoa !! May I have my breath back now please?
A profound conviction lies within that one line repeated throughout.
Hopeless romantics might hint that it is laden with temerity, but I
think life experience and circumstance breed certain truths for us.
Each of our truths may not compliment or even agree with others'
truths, but that makes them no less real for us. The past, so unique
to each individual creates, not only lasting convictions but barriers
to a great many things. Truths, desires, fears, but most of all love.
And when we recognize this within ourselves, the possibilities for
us to overcome our hurdles, become endless.
I think this has to be one of your finest writes I have read. [I apologize
for not visiting here sooner]. I am completely floored by the sheer
audacity and astounding wisdom written here. And the emotion
that you've captured, well . . . it just (as I stated) takes my breath.
GOD! I relate to this. And relate well. Your briliance is only matched
by your tenacity of thought. You have much to be proud of here.
XO
~Breezy |
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