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Contributed by
AshRayne
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Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:18:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
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A simple touch,
Sends shivers down my spine,
A waterfall of ice.
So wonderful,
A simple kiss.
Red velvet to the touch.
The joy with every caress,
How I wish to make you mine.
If only it were so.
What more could I want,
All that you give should be enough,
But I want more.
As I lean down to the scarlet,
I can hear you breathe.
I sense your hearts momentum.
The pulsing beat,
Pushing me over the edge.
All I see is black.
I yearn for what lies beneath you,
Dreaming of white-hot touch.
Feeling everything from nothing.
What more is there to give,
I hunger for the pulse.
I want more.
Copyright ©
AshRayne
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2005-08-26 17:18:28]
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Re: More
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by shelby on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:30:01 PM AEST
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I feel your wanting and desire yet still a hidden message below the surface.Nicely done
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 06:07:37 PM AEST
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ohh.... i LIKE this one. mysterious, but well done. very good. and it's okay to 'want more' but don't get to carried away, cause then you could lose what you have. well, done. i like this one a lot. keep up the good work!
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by anitajames on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 07:43:08 PM AEST
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| "feeling everything from nothing" This holds many meanings and speaks to me. Good write. |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 10:55:50 PM AEST
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life is an illusion as well as everything else
beautiful poem well crafted and deffinately
understood . . .
Ben |
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by Midnight on
Sunday, 28th August 2005 @ 01:47:45 PM AEST
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great job thanx for explaining it to me i realy like it now that i understand more like it alot
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Re: More
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by Midnight on
Sunday, 28th August 2005 @ 01:47:51 PM AEST
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great job thanx for explaining it to me i realy like it now that i understand more like it alot
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Re: More
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by AshRayne on
Saturday, 10th September 2005 @ 01:09:12 AM AEST
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would anybody ever think this poem was about blood-lust, not the lust of the flesh? "As i lean down to the scarlett..." "I yearn for what lies beneath you..." "All that you give should be enough, But I want more..."
Exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
~Ash |
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