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Lost Control (Sand & Bone)
Contributed by
CrazyCowboy557
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Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 12:37:46 AM in AEST
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She's beauty and she's pain
I'm addicted to her game
The remote to her mind
Is always set on rewind
She's a selfish witch with a heart of gold
The fire makes her hard to hold
I can't get her out of my mind
Her body could be mine
But I can't speak
I'm too weak
She's got her whip around my neck
I've missed my baggage check
Now I'm stuck in the lobby again
Left to ponder all my sins
Left for days and my mind no longer controls
The keyboard to my mind is full of holes
Like a zombified piece of sand
My mind and body disconnected from my hand
A puppet to a slave master
Always working faster and faster
No longer seeing the light of day
I've been left to decay
Sand and bones are all that remain
A slave to a master that went insane
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CrazyCowboy557
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2005-08-27 00:37:46]
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Re: Lost Control (Sand & Bone)
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by Archie on
Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 03:16:23 AM AEST
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| I am not sure what i think about this one. the words flowed well. (I think this descrbes infactuation) Great write. |
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Re: Lost Control (Sand & Bone)
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by anitajames on
Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 02:33:24 PM AEST
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| Interesting and thought provoking |
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Re: Lost Control (Sand & Bone)
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 03:42:51 PM AEST
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| I'm guessing this is about a girl but could be wrong and possibly not understand what it is about but It is very intresing and different. In a good way Good write |
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Re: Lost Control (Sand & Bone)
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 06:42:42 PM AEST
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I don't know about this one. This sounds more like an addiction to me. Where in the end the addicted is always left to decay because the slave master is not attainable. Once your are hooked you are left on your own because they know they have you addicted and you will come back. Maybe wrong but that is what I get from it.
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Re: Lost Control (Sand & Bone)
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by CrazyCowboy557 on
Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 08:52:26 PM AEST
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| MD, that sounds better than about a woman, but when I wrote it, I just wrote it, I'm not sure what I was thinkin' |
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