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Madman
Contributed by
Poet_of_anger
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Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 06:44:15 PM in AEST
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-Can you hear me
Or am I dreaming
I think I am thinking
These words I am screaming-
Let me out of my cage
I know I can do something great
I know I can if given one chance
So much can be learned from a dark past
Breathe in right away
Don't let the feelings start to fade
Hopes secured together we'll stand
Away from the world in another land
Misunderstood for who we are
Society made but left us in the dark
Are we to accept this unjust deed
When if we stand together we're freed
Hand in hand peace shall reign
Common grounds without any hate
No religion needed here
Peace on earth peace in the air
Just a madman on the street
Glared at by all who he sees
His words rang out and touched my ears
His message rang loud and clear
Working together all as one
This world could be reborn
Remember what all the great ones said
Before their tragic deaths
-Can you hear me
Can you feel me
Are you with me
Or am I alone-
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Re: Madman
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 07:32:32 PM AEST
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"Pierce pride with words of humbleness
drive apathy from rebels
Give wisdom to the child that asks
grant slaves their resolution
Feed those who hunger for the words
to find their inspiration
Parley the cause of destitiutes
improve some how our nation"
These are my words to you on a very good poem. The quote is from "O'le Writer of the Ages"
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Re: Madman
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 07:48:09 PM AEST
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I am quite curious to know how you hear the melody on this. I like the words and feel.
A question ... "Society made but left us in the dark" ... is there a word missing in this line ? Should I be reading a second "us" after made ?
A sugestion ... "His words rang out and touched my ears ...His message rang loud and clear" ... there are places that I personally attempt to be repettitve and others where I try to avoid it with a passion ... Would it change the meaning or melody if the first line said "Reached Out" and it seems like the rhythm hiccups at the second line what would it sound like if you added "message rang both loud and clear.
This is just what I noted as I read through it and may not work at all with how you hear it.
Nazmythian ~
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Re: Madman
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by acidicblasphemy on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 05:25:28 PM AEST
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| I feel this. I'm considered an "outcast", so I go through it. I really like the lyrics...I'd love to hear it how you do. |
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