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Today i fell
Contributed by
trini
on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 08:06:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Today I fell
The gravel worked its way under my skin
New black marbles under my flesh
Leaving bloody handprints on the ground
Heaving myself up
And I walked on
I fell again the next day
The cement pushed past my finger tips
And ripped away my fingerprints
A reminder for next time
Lifting myself up
And I walked on
Funny how we never learn after the first fall
We make the same mistakes
Day in and day out
In circles we tread
Working our way underground
And I walked on
Copyright ©
trini
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2005-09-01 20:06:18]
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Re: Today i fell
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by justme03 on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 08:21:46 PM AEST
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:o i liked this
the whole idea behind this poem is awesome
love the way u wrote it |
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Re: Today i fell
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 09:02:35 PM AEST
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appealing thoughts dear poet.....I sometimes feel the same way as you....repetition is all there is in this life.....
you conveyed your thoughts very well...and I loved the way you used imagery to describe your 'falling' in the walk of life......great to read.
May you continue to rise up! |
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Re: Today i fell
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 03:28:37 AM AEST
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Heh. Indeed it is.
(Nice job, by the way)
Andrew
(thoughtful at the moment) |
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