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Rest in Pieces
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 05:17:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Release you from your obligation
waste but a moment with hesitation
Hush now child, your fears have come to pass
grab a seat at the front, pay attention in class
Let's learn about anatomy
How the heart causes the calamity
The mind goes on a tangent
Foolish emotions run rampant
Explain about the birds and the bees
Love, lust, and other things that appease
Observe the emotional contortionist
Ransom for love, by the heartless extortionist
Love struck the thunder that erupts
the sleepless dreams that fate corrupts
Foreboding shadow reflects
collective disdain connects
Feelings that shortchange
Priorities rearrange
Irregular compassion
doled out in a timely fashion
You spotted my heart from an aerial
but what you witnessed was it's burial.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-09-02 17:17:02]
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 05:53:06 PM AEST
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*****Release you from your obligation
waste but a moment with hesitation
Hush now child, your fears have come to pass
grab a seat at the front, pay attention in class
I always sat up front, so I would listen to the teacher, not be distracted.. That and I am a dreamer, so It kept me from looking out the window. I must admit, I did write poems in math class.. Math to me was boring at that time.. I learned to love it later on.
I see this poem is a different type of class though, anatomy.. learning all about the heart, dissecting it, trying to figure out what makes it tick.
****You spotted my heart from an aerial
but what you witnessed was it's burial.
Someone was kind of late. death ..
This is why we listen to our heart before it does die.. because the mind can lead it on.. a lot of times down the wrong path.
Well, I am sure you could interpret this poem in many ways.. I enjoyed it sensing it this way.
We all need a class on anatomy.. perhaps we can all lay out our own heart and study it first.
Raquel Leah :D
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 06:52:55 PM AEST
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Dearest Scorp a sad and heart breaking write u have here. I sense so much pain and sadness in ur life. May ur heart find the happiness and love that it deserves. For u are a wonderful person and u deserve the best my dear friend.
Otherwise an outstanding and touching write.
I'm here 4 u my friend.
heartfelt hugs for dearest Scorp,
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by brew on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 10:21:01 PM AEST
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karma.......I wrote a write titled.......Eyes wide Shut.......hmmmmm your write is very deep.....full of hurt....hope the pain can subside.! Thanks for sharing
Brew~ |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Alibi on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 12:04:51 AM AEST
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| My dear! This is tragic! It would seem everyone on here has a broken heart right now. I hope you find true happiness soon. I've read some of your other work before, and I must say, I respect the way you write. It is from the heart, and truthful. Stuff we can all relate to. Blessings to you. |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by LostAmbition on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 03:26:58 AM AEST
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Woah ouch! That ending is deep!
I'm sorry for your pain but i have to say the rhymes are awsum!!! Keep writing.
HOpe love finds u soon. If not, im single;P
Just joking with ya, hope your a girl! lol cuz im a guy:O
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by LostAmbition on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 03:33:08 AM AEST
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Whew! U are a girl!!! lol!!
I checked your account and saw the girl picture thingy.
I was worried for a sec there!
THought i was hittin on a dude:O
All the best to ya tho seriously. |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 05:54:42 PM AEST
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U go girl this tell's it like it is straight from the heart and that heart is hurting and this poem is beautiful u r an emotional technician lady
and and a most prudent artist, well done scorp u gave him hell . . .
Ben
((((((((((scorp)))))))))))
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Mangos on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 10:38:47 AM AEST
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Wow scorp, powerful as usual, “Love struck the thunder that erupts
the sleepless dreams that fate corrupts”. Beautiful lines….how does one prepare for fate?.....is it even possible…?.....nice write as always.
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by secretwind on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 11:54:49 AM AEST
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| Excellent |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 05:08:20 AM AEST
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Scorp, just how do you do it? One great write after another.
"The mind goes on a tangent
Foolish emotions run rampant"
Oh, I see. Thank you. Yes another great write from the Scorpenator!!!!
Love lost love gained
Driving one insane
Such thougtful emotions causing our insanity
Suffering thoughtlessness from another's inhumanity.
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 05:08:27 AM AEST
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Scorp, just how do you do it? One great write after another.
"The mind goes on a tangent
Foolish emotions run rampant"
Oh, I see. Thank you. Yes another great write from the Scorpenator!!!!
Love lost love gained
Driving one insane
Such thougtful emotions causing our insanity
Suffering thoughtlessness from another's inhumanity.
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by sweetangeluk on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 06:14:26 AM AEST
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Wow this was fantastic
((HUGS))
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by Archie on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 11:05:22 PM AEST
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| I like this alot. I like the detail you express about human nature. The gist of this poem is seen in its last 2 lines to me. Love should be something deeper . . . |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by deathbringer on
Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 12:07:53 AM AEST
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Love is shallow.Love is in vain
Of your broken heart only ashes remain.
~Dea†hbringeR~ |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by emystar on
Saturday, 24th December 2005 @ 05:06:45 PM AEST
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Well not what I suspected from the title but a very wise, creative, true write.
Awesome!
4 give me for being so far behind.
luv, huggs, happy, happy holidays,
emy |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 22nd May 2014 @ 06:08:37 PM AEST
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beautifully penned my friend, it is sharp, heartfelt
and has that special quality that is only you, an
exquisite poem,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Rest in Pieces
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 8th February 2022 @ 07:48:04 PM AEST
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Truly sad but beautiful and clever...
I really liked this....
It was a wonderful read and beautifully constructed.... |
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