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Yourself
Contributed by
black_star
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Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 11:23:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Alone beyond the canyon,
The standout of the fleet.
But while you rise above them,
The grab onto your feet.
One step to you is ninety,
One smile is worth eight,
And still you go unnoticed,
A hook thats lost its bate.
Youre braver that the stingray,
You try so hard youd die,
They take you just for granted,
They see you as a fly.
Dont worry do it your way,
Its you that will succeed,
And when theyre put in your place,
Its you that they will need.
Copyright ©
black_star
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2005-09-03 23:23:05]
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Re: Yourself
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 11:25:51 PM AEST
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| I liked this poem. Though I almost purposely over looked it because it said Please Leave A Comment. You get more comments if you put something interesting about the poem, trust me. Other then that, keep writing. |
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Re: Yourself
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by trini on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 11:55:26 PM AEST
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very inspirational. i thik this is the only poem
that i have actually seen someone rhyme without falter. very nice write. keep up the good work
-trini |
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Re: Yourself
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 12:59:47 AM AEST
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Ok..lol
Ill comment-
It was good..
a little ambiguous-
but great diction and grammer..
I liked it-
B
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Re: Yourself
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 01:55:17 AM AEST
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trini must be new here to say this is the only work that has a rhyme without falter..(which is a most liberal comment)
see>>BenPapa
>>Haunted Scorp
>>MorningDove
and least of all..me-
pleased to think before you type where somethings goes to this forum...thanks for not insulting us..
(just an opinionative comment..not the views of the site persay)
Sincerely,
Billy aka M.O.H.
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