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Once Upon a Million Stars
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 10:22:31 PM in AEST
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Once, upon a million stars
I wish, I wished I might
Live this vision in my mind
This dream I dreamed each night
I was as a butterfly
With wings, with wings of fire
You were as a buttercup
My heart, my heart's desire
Gently now, I dared to land
I touch, I touched your face
'Pon your petals tenderly
Our souls, our souls embrace
Softly as a sleeping breath
We danced the dance of sighs
In the meadow still, beneath
The blue, the bluest skies
Noble stars, I prayed to grant
Let this, let this come true
When I wish I may I might
Be loved, be loved by you
Wake me not and let me lie
In sleep, if sleep shall be
All the precious time allowed
To dwell, to dwell with thee
L. Carling c2005
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Rakerman1999
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 10:26:53 PM AEST
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As lovely as ever larry, imence and yet ever delicate in it's approach, a truly exqusit poem
of love and by a most artistic craftsmen a joy to read . . .
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 10:33:51 PM AEST
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Such tenderness and longing. It is so very simple yet exquisite in the lacing of the words and emotions.
Beautiful Larry, as always.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by MadCackle on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 10:36:24 PM AEST
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| a pleasure to read nice writ "Softly as a sleeping breath We danced a dance of sighs" my fav line |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 11:27:13 PM AEST
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Brilliant!!!!!!!!
Elegant and lovely piece of poetry.....just absolutely wonderful to read...
Peaceful and tranquil...im AMAZED |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by PumpkinPie on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 12:38:21 AM AEST
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What have I missed ! This poem falls in my hands at exactly the right time and soothes my heart and mind in knowing it can be described with such beautiful words. Nothing like dreaming to satisfy your needs.It's sometimes even much better than reality =)
PumpkinPie |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 04:47:20 AM AEST
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Larry, this was just beautiful and amazing.
It's a simple poem but it packs a punch of emotions. Nicely done als always.
Jane~ |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 07:09:25 AM AEST
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Very euphonous. Loved this..
Jenni |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 07:14:07 AM AEST
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What an incredibly, light, uplifting piece!!
It flows beautifully and seems to dance off the page.
Oh Barkeep!!
A double for my good friend and author!! |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 02:50:32 PM AEST
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The title alone captivated me.
I am greatly influenced by your beautiful art , so much lovely appeal to my eyes and soul.
Just beauty spread all over.. Marvelous write.
Raquel Leah |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 04:41:56 PM AEST
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Beautiful Larry. The title captivated me, but that was nothing
compared to the words that lie in wait. How tremendously
touching. Everlasting beauty and grace everflow from
your pen. Brilliant write.
~Breezy |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 11:26:54 PM AEST
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Beautiful Larry and very touching, written with
the style that only someone of your caliber is
capable of. The images that it brought to my
mind were very nice and it was just plain
awesome.
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Merry on
Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 07:50:56 PM AEST
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Larry, this reads like a true classic. Beautifully done.
daisies for the king
merry |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by wizard on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 05:50:33 PM AEST
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such a wonderful poem...i loved the format and rhyming scheme.
wizard |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 10:57:52 PM AEST
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This write...this is pure emotion, so tenderly felt and so graciously written, it touched me larry, specially with my current state of reality...bows to greatness*
~Clark |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Kie on
Sunday, 6th November 2005 @ 10:55:52 AM AEST
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It seems I always cry when I get to reading your poetry. You touched my heart with your elegance, serenity, kindness, giving nature and your ability to take your heart and blend into a pen. You also have a remarkable way of making a person feel special as a friend. That isn't something most people naturally have. It is one of those rare traits that comes from inside and for whatever reason you are blessed with so many wonderful traits and talents.
It is a beautiful, breathtaking poem.
You are the best of best.
If you can feel a star and write about it---every single dream that you have is attainable.
Kie |
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Re: Once Upon a Million Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 10:12:57 PM AEST
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| I am just sitting here shaking my head at how beautifully it all flow and the words just paint such a deep feeling within....Mike |
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