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Close your eyes
Contributed by
Loende
on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 03:31:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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Close your eyes
There is an echo to touch.
The soul remembers it all too well.
For when the veil between life and dream
Shimmers into form around us,
When the control that we hold so firm,
Shakes free and soars,
Oh, the memory returns.
Can you feel it? That halting touch?
A subtle memory of heat
A whispered caress, a fleeting glance,
A passionate and fevered embrace.
The soft brush of a palm
Your answering rise of flesh
Until the moment is so drawn out
That you can feel the very air around you.
Close your eyes then and slip gently into that veil
That place of neither here nor there.
Let it close 'round you, as easy as breathing.
Throw wide, the gates of your guarded, wounded heart
Close your eyes,
And fall in love again.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2005-09-06 03:31:11]
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 04:03:04 AM AEST
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Well now, this is good stuff! Beautiful imagery and feeling woven together. You've done a great job of describing in poetic fashion that aye meikle strange feeling, that is nae sae hard tae feel but none sae easy tae describe. A braw piece.
Anndra fionn-calg fin-dubh. |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 06:03:09 AM AEST
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I very much liked this one. It had the feel of... a woven work well woven, in a way. Bueno, te digo no mas que me gustó tu poema, es muy buena.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 06:31:02 AM AEST
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This was just outstandingly beautiful.
You just wrote this perfectly and your verses are just sensational. I truely loved this.
Thanks for posting.
Jane~ |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Caged Soul on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 08:29:16 AM AEST
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All I can say is... Beautifull. I had goose pimples as I read this one! You paid a lot of attention to the flow and consistancy of the poem, which makes it easy to read, understand and feel.
Good job!
~souLBro~ |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 09:11:21 AM AEST
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Yeah, okay, exceptional. I'm in love
(with the poem)
and bow to anyone who can write such an intoxicating, uplifting piece like this.
Spike |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 11:07:34 PM AEST
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Amazing write...I loved it...
Jenni |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by brew on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 11:20:27 PM AEST
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Um just ......WOW................made me look into what I know is still there and know,yes you should keep going and let the heart always try to flow. Yes it can be pounded and hurt....but new life, and flow can be. Astounding, write.!
Brew~ |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 10th September 2005 @ 06:30:44 PM AEST
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What a gorgeous piece! One would have to be entirely ignorant of passion to not be moved by this. I can only imagine that a large majority of readers actually DID close their eyes at the conclusion of this piece. I know I did...
Beautiful, beautiful work. May you never set down your pen again, Loende... for clearly, you were meant for this.
Swept away,
~Snemmy
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 1st October 2008 @ 04:58:50 PM AEST
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Dawn~
Yes my dear poetess you are amazing.
Wow, you swept and blew my mind away
with this heavenly gorgeous write of yours.
I even closed my eyes at the end of this remarkable
and very well composed poem you beautifully penned
my friend. I am a huge fan of your writes. May you
never lay your pen down my dear poetess.
Huge hugs from your fan,
dreamer
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Re: Close your eyes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 08:55:41 AM AEST
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| wow! amazing! what more can i say? |
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Re: Close your eyes
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by elle on
Tuesday, 5th May 2009 @ 07:19:17 PM AEST
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| this mesmerizes. . . it compounds. . . lures you in with intricacies. . . splendid journey. peace. elle |
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