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freeverse
Contributed by
edsel
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Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 08:36:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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vultures dancing in the midnight sun
creepy creatures singing lullabies of pain
love in and love gone
falling leaves on land of the barren
tis song shouting in the ear
tapping rain on something so possesive
fingers tracing the something surreal
no one hears the screaming deal
so the man on the black cape
from the inside soul cave
backlashed, and angry
raining lavas of emotions..
raining lavas of emotions..
so be it
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edsel
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2005-09-09 08:36:35]
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Re: freeverse
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by remote on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 02:26:27 PM AEST
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| First two sections are quite nice but then it loses steam. You could do well to continue the construction in the line of those sections. |
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Re: freeverse
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by Ruby2sdy on
Sunday, 25th June 2006 @ 08:56:12 AM AEST
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Very abstract! I liked it, it's nice to read soemthing a little bit different! Good write!
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