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Whatever The Pain
Contributed by
Opium
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Thursday, 16th January 2003 @ 05:00:00 PM in AEST
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Shallow were your eyes to me
Tears may fall but youll never see
And hollow was your heart to me
Tell me how our love might be
Just kiss me, stab me, oh my life you drain!
Burn me, love me, leave me whatever the pain
I brawl not your cherubs nor your imps
But spare me the twinge of your glimpse
You love me not, or just love me still?
You sure torment me and incarcerate my will
Just hold me, hurt me and leave me shattered
Your beauty, splendor, just a dream so blurred
For all those things that you do
Is our love just overdue?
Do you hold for me any feelings?
I cant bear your poisonous stings
Just scrape me, hate me, leave in me another stain
Hug me, hang me in this vast deserted plain
Just love me for whatever the pain!
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2003-01-16 17:00:00]
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Re: Whatever The Pain
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 17th January 2003 @ 12:10:03 AM AEST
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I dont know why this has no comments i just know this a great poem. I totally agree with love comes pain. I loved the rhyme scheme this was so well done. I'll look for more of your stuff.
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Re: Whatever The Pain
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by gina on
Friday, 17th January 2003 @ 06:36:35 AM AEST
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eh 3a chou laken 3am tetfalsaf 3layyeh !?ma see urself first ...
oh watever the pain , misery loves company ...remember :)
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Re: Whatever The Pain
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by ladymae3 on
Friday, 17th January 2003 @ 04:29:55 PM AEST
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I like ur emotion in the beginning, but then u went on to stuff that it seemed u didnt know how to use some words:
I brawl not your cherubs nor your imps
But spare me the twinge of your glimpse
You love me not, or just love me still?
You sure torment me and incarcerate my will
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Re: Whatever The Pain
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by Opium on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 10:41:34 AM AEST
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| raytik khrite wma 7kite, you seem to have a very very very poor english education, and if you were of english native then you have a problem ....a word of advice: use a dictionnary next time ot don't use the comment option betbayne 7mara |
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Re: Whatever The Pain
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 11:11:41 AM AEST
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Well Opium...I already told you how I love your style of writing and this is just another example of why. Very well done once again!
And a special thank you to ladymae for once again giving us the wisdom of her vast poetic experiences. |
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Re: Whatever The Pain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 01:24:25 PM AEST
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LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL u vul lol ,chou hal 7akeh, ma 3eb !hehe ill translate the arabic part to her lol,its the most important part in ur reply lol, 7elweh mennak
GINGIN |
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