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IF YOU
Contributed by
lancaster
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Saturday, 10th September 2005 @ 11:41:08 PM in AEST
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If you have let me down
Dont look up
If you could just understand
You would fill this lovin cup
If you extend your hand
Grip mine hard
If you lend your heart
Dont expect it back
If you were really mine
I would feel it inside
If you cant see the finish line
Why run in circles, why hide
If you think you have it made
Think again
If you wished you would have stayed
What a shame
If you want to know the truth
I havent it to give
If what you seek is the proof
The puddin is wearing thin
If you knew how it really was
Instead of how it should be
If you could cure this buzz
Then you can float in my sea
If you have become obsessed
Then go see a shrink
If you feel this became a mess
Then you need not blink
If you came alone
You wont leave on your knees
If you find your home
Then lock the door and hide your keys
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Re: IF YOU
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by BEBE on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 12:13:08 AM AEST
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Thats was a pretty good write.. Great Job
GODBLESS
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Re: IF YOU
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by remote on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 05:04:53 AM AEST
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| Lovely flow you have go there. |
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Re: IF YOU
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by LostAmbition on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 04:31:19 PM AEST
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dude u sound self absorbed.
do u evn care about that girl?
its guys like u that give us good guys a badname
mabye tha shrink should be for u :D |
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Re: IF YOU
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by brokenwings on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 02:28:59 AM AEST
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had a great flow but it spoke to me in several ways, good job you confused a blond...lol, it was a very good write...
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Re: IF YOU
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 01:45:04 PM AEST
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To me, this write and the emotions seem conflicted. Maybe a bit of a battle within yourself too...I like this. It's thought provoking and introspective in a way.
Good write.
H.S. |
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