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My Own Prison
Contributed by
CarolinaBlue
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Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 12:33:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The Nightmare
I am a prisoner in my own mind
Held captive, in a room without a view
Darkness is all that I see
Mingled with scattered thoughts of you
I toss and I turn in the bed
Plagued by demons past and future
Screaming to be rescued from this fate
Or a window of hope to shine through
A shred of light to guide me
To wake me from this torturous place
Freeing me from this dark labyrinth
Where all paths lead to your embrace
Skin crawling on the outside
Struggling to get away on the inside
Bound by the shadows, bound by fear
The nightmare and reality collide
The Reality
I am a prisoner in my own mind
Held captive, in a room with no view
Hand over my mouth as I gasp to breathe
My worst nightmare now coming true
I toss and turn in the bed
Plagued by the stench of your breath
Screaming to be rescued from this fate
A fate, far far worse than death
Skin crawling on the outside
My innocence flowing from inside
Struggling to get away but my hands tied
Helpless I laid there and just cried
Still praying for someone to free me
To save me from this dark awful place
A prisoner forever in my own mind
Enslaved by images no one can erase
CB 2005
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CarolinaBlue
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2005-09-12 00:33:42]
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Re: My Own Prison
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 01:21:31 AM AEST
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| Intesnse write. It was wonderful.. Excellent work. |
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Re: My Own Prison
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 01:39:37 AM AEST
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Well, I'm glad this isn't about you. This write is very deep , and dark and told so gut-wrenchingly real! True or not, clearly alot of emotion is behind this write, and was poured into it. I like the style and concept you used as well. The 'story' of both the nightmare, and the reality. Excellent job with this one Blue...truly a 'reach out and grab you' type write.
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Re: My Own Prison
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 10:54:40 PM AEST
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As I read Blue..
further and further down the page,
I felt alone..it brought back many bad..very bad feelings for me..
I myself, felt alone in this..'till I realized it wasn't you-
I literaly, took a deep breath..and felt ok-
'till I realized the pain overall..
Thoughts and Prayers to them..
(It's so good to finally see you again Blue)
Yours-
Billy |
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Re: My Own Prison
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 01:42:54 AM AEST
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A most stirring and emotional poem never the less deep and tainted with vivid emotions
nicely expressed . . .
Ben |
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Re: My Own Prison
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 05:59:31 PM AEST
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Very profound and intense write. The verse and imagery is very powerful. This is very well written, and certainly captures and depicts deep and heartfelt despiration.
I'm glad it's not you, but sad if it is somebody.
Well done,
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Re: My Own Prison
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by Ivy on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 10:22:04 PM AEST
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| a good and intense wrie. |
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Re: My Own Prison
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 7th January 2006 @ 09:11:50 PM AEST
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| I like the reality/nightmare thing you did here, and the poem seemed to flow emotionally and stylistically. This seems like a cathartic write, and I'm not sure how true it is, but it was written very well nevertheless. The way you conveyed these feelings was excellent. Great work |
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