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Eleven Stories High
Contributed by
hardrocker15198916
on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 08:14:21 PM in AEST
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floating never faltering in her disposition
clinging to the edge full of furys rage
slamming the edge but not shaking
wishing she wouldve just stayed in the cage
blindly seeking to a window cracked open
hoping to climb back in to the eleventh story
suicide wasnt to be cost but drained
hiding her dissatisfaction in present to her morally
thewind tried to picke her up
and fling her from the edge
and she hoped that none
would find her body in blood; dead
scooting over to the sound of her music
left on as she tried a final time to die
she climbed through the window to warm air
and once agian in sadness she did lie
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Re: Eleven Stories High
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by Pyrofungus on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 08:24:11 PM AEST
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so sad......it made me think of a girl that died not to long ago....
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Re: Eleven Stories High
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by sride686 on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 06:40:13 AM AEST
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| this is a sad write but it was a good write and like summer said it makes you think. it brings up sad thoughts of a twisted life that sometimes seems like the only answer is death. i've thought this way before but there is to much to miss and life is really to easy to live if you only enjoy what things you have and can control. take care my friend and keep up the good writes girl....Steve |
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Re: Eleven Stories High
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by Ruby2sdy on
Sunday, 25th June 2006 @ 03:23:23 PM AEST
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Nice write, I enjoyed it, some nice use of alliterative/assonating words, and a good rhythm. Keep up the good work,
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