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Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 02:16:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The world falls down
Around a captured moment
And I exist within it
With freeze frame clarity,
In perfect awe
Of the image emblazoned
There, on the inside
Of my closed eyelids.
Not one moment,
But countless many now -
Caught in sepia hues
Or pulsating true color,
Some even in black and white,
They prod relentlessly
From inside out
Redefining reality.
And I give each,
In turn, a moments glory
Holding it too tightly
In the palm of a trembling hand
Imagining not just that
But, also the then and the if
That scream out
From somewhere inside.
Oh! there is movement
In the shadows
That lay just outside the frame
Slow, comforting, quiet
Undeniable movement,
Tracking though my minds eye
Like a whisper
Crossing a room.
I can hear them
And can feel the insistent pulse
Of a heartbeat, aching
To be released just then
As I open my eyes to find
There's a bit of blue
Left in the black and white
And, perhaps... rightfully so.
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Silent-No-More
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2005-09-14 02:16:53]
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Re: Images
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by glassicallyunsuperficial on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 02:52:00 AM AEST
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| very well-written. |
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Re: Images
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 03:01:39 AM AEST
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I like the poem, but... I really like the author's note! I feel like that all the time. I want to write something, but then the words come in the order that they want, forming their own poem. Sometimes it's better to watch a poem writing itself then to write one. Um... sorry. Seriously, I liked the poem too.
Take care, sorry for then 'late night' comment.
David |
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Re: Images
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by n2dep2care on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 06:57:00 AM AEST
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“I can hear them
And can feel the insistent pulse
Of a heartbeat, aching
To be released just then
As I open my eyes to find
There's a bit of blue
Left in the black and white
And, perhaps... rightfully so.”
Brilliant stanza SNM! Speaking to the eternal hope that survives in each of us- no matter what our circumstances. A needed refrain for our world today. High marks and best regards.
Laurie
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Re: Images
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 07:19:45 AM AEST
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That vivid imagery was just beautifully captured Snemmy.
I can hear them
And can feel the insistent pulse
Of a heartbeat, aching
To be released just then
As I open my eyes to find
There's a bit of blue
Left in the black and white
And, perhaps... rightfully so
*Sighs* I'm just way too impressed with this to rant about it. I could but I wouldn't.
Jane~
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Re: Images
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by Mangs on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 07:32:24 AM AEST
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| Absolutely wonderful how the abstract words and thoughts linked together make sense in the end....perfect... |
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Re: Images
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by remote on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 09:03:01 AM AEST
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| Good thing you just watched it happen, you could have spoilt it. Very good. |
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Re: Images
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by brew on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 09:56:52 AM AEST
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wonderful words, which flowed and flowed. Nice absract, indeed. Like it, and can understand.
Brew~ |
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Re: Images
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by anitajames on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 10:47:09 AM AEST
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There's a bit of blue
Left in the black and white
And, perhaps... rightfully so.
This speaks to the promise of hope and good things to come. That is what I see anyway. That is what is so wonderful about great poetry. Everyone sees something that speaks to them in a different way. Great write! |
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Re: Images
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by WAE on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 11:29:27 AM AEST
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| Too abstract for me... |
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Re: Images
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 06:22:45 PM AEST
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......................Stunned Silence..................
Well, my dear, unfortunately, that is all I can utter with my trembling fingers and malfunctioned brain.... You have left me.... speechless... And I do hope my words will come soon so I can properly praise this... poetic masterpiece. I thank you... for always creating something that pulls at my heart, and inspires me. All my love. Forever,
Your little flower,
~*Stephy*~ ((((More when brain reboots, :-P)))) |
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Re: Images
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 09:14:51 PM AEST
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There's no stopping them when they want out, is there? I seem to be plagued by that variety of work lately, so I really appreciated this one. It was an amazing read, so thank you!
Be Well,
Loende |
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Re: Images
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 03:42:58 AM AEST
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I just love the way you seem to so effortlessly watch those words fall onto the page and arrange themselves. Yeah, uh-huh. Just admit it Snem, you have a brilliant talent of arranging them in such an exquisite order yourself.
*applauds*
Thank you,
Tim
:-)
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