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Imperfectly Perfect
Contributed by
DesolantDreamer
on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:13:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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You are lying there
On the bench getting ready
To bench a school record of 140
I smile at you and cheer you on
That was the first time Ive seen you smile at me
Since the day we truly met
I realized then
That cupid has shot an arrow
Through my heart
Im in love with you
At first I didnt know
It was love
A simple infatuation
Thats what I thought
But now
I think you are perfect
Despite your issues
Sure, you smoke
What teen hasnt?
Yeah, youre punk
But to me thats hot
Of course, you curse
And you arent that smart
You cheat in English
(That is where we learn to speak and write it. Japan rules.)
But youre perfect
At least to me
You have your problems
Who doesnt?
But hey, thats what makes you, you
Can we be imperfectly perfect
Together?
Just me and you?
When I see you, and you say hey
People say I have that certain glow
And that certain spark in my eye
They know its love
You are the first
That has actually motivated me
To do something about myself
I look better than ever
My grades shot up
Ive actually got friends
Ive got everything in the world
Except you
But if things stay at this pace
Soon Ill have even that
Maybe my dear sweet, Zach
Youll realize that what I say is true
Youre imperfectly perfect
Maybe I am too
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2005-09-15 09:13:51]
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Re: Imperfectly Perfect
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by Archie on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:32:43 AM AEST
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| That was a good write. It is not good to include bad things in your poem that are generic or include all. I understand what you mean when you use them but it is a presumption and usually presumptions are not true. |
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Re: Imperfectly Perfect
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by orgygirl on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 12:57:26 AM AEST
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| I didn't care for the part where Zach isn't that smart, cheats in English and whatnot but the rest was well put. This poem was imperfectly perfect. |
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