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our secrets
Contributed by
igba
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Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 09:26:53 AM in AEST
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do u think i will let the world know
that we are silently drifting apart
do u think i will shout about
how love turned it"s back on us
do u think i will reveal how
we grope for words,instead of conversing
do you imagine i will disclose the trauma you go through
trying to make things appear normal
are you aware that our lack of warmth
has been patiently pleading for separation
are you expecting me to let you know
i don"t feel alive in ur presence any longer
are you just gonna sit there and cry
anticipating comfort from me
can"t you see it is not working
do i have to let you know that i'm a lying cheat
is there a way out
is our secret worth keeping
Copyright ©
igba
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2005-09-16 09:26:53]
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Re: our secrets
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by remote on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 09:40:17 AM AEST
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| Could have been better if you had spelled in full, put some punctuations here and there. |
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Re: our secrets
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 11:11:08 AM AEST
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few mechanics that need fixing
loved the poem!!! absolutely beautiful
i also felt like this
and i hate that feeling
but i hope you get through it
and i hope that you'll move on to better things
~*Bethani*~ |
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Re: our secrets
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by WAE on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 11:56:08 AM AEST
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A good writing. I'd change 'trauma' for 'wound' or something alike to let it sound more natural.
Good luck...
Alex |
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Re: our secrets
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 05:45:35 PM AEST
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This is so honest and heartfelt.. I am sure a lot of people will identify with this.... as we too have 'our secret'
Thank you for sharing...
Jenni |
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