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Borderline Behaviour
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 05:19:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
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A textbook case
anti-social disgrace
Given but a taste
judge not in haste
What role's needed?
(conversation gets heated)
Plead insane
cry in vain
Haunting eyes
crafty disguise
Refer to your books---
the babbling brooks!
Read my mind
thoughts rewind
Seal the vault
a hypnotizing halt
Jot down your notes
peel away my coats
Sit with smug superiority
I'll feign inferiority
Think you know my type???
Don't believe the hype!
Close your book---
take a closer look
Watch the pendulum swing
(won't do a damn thing)
Leave me be
You don't know me!!
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 06:38:43 PM AEST
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Well... it sure is a different attitude than I had when I saw one (for depression). You've portrayed it well though - it has a note of sassiness to it that really appeals to me.
Nice work, scorp!
Blessings, J.
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 06:54:27 PM AEST
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Wonderfully written. I enjoyed this immensely. Very real.
Close your book---
take a closer look
Watch the pendulum swing
(won't do a damn thing)
Leave me be
You don't know me!!
I loved this stanza! Great write!
~Breezy
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by tdp on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 08:05:42 PM AEST
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| Anger is a good thing and when you can express it .. it is a great sign! I like your style alot! Talk about borderline or manic behavior , that is probalby what you see in my writing.. its liek explosion of words, emotions all coming out at once. KInd of an uncontrollabe thing. You have a great way of expressing your self vividly and to the point |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 08:33:38 PM AEST
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I guess anyone judging you, would give you some sort of anger inside wouldn't it? Plus getting it out is a great thing. I loved it though, I guess you were as good a writter then as now, which is always good, love the writting, can't wait for more.
- Cassy |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by LostAmbition on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 10:12:05 PM AEST
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Yay! feist and crazy!
no wonder i like your poems!
jjust playing with ya
i like this
great stuff full of spunk |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 11:26:42 PM AEST
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I feel sorry for the shrink, but I like the fiesty attitude, as long as it doesn't get obnoxious and out of hand. Our Scorparetta would never do that would she? lol
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 11:34:45 PM AEST
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Nice and rhythmic scorp love the continuity of this poem another gem my friend . . .
(((((scorp)))))
Ben |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by remote on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 04:31:29 AM AEST
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| Lovely flow, seems like you wrote it in under 5 minutes, seems so effortless. |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 06:16:07 PM AEST
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Scorp u talented Miss. U always know how to produce a great write. I love the way u can express urself so clearly. One can not judge if one does not know. Well done my dear friend. True talent never dies dearest Scorp. You've proved that. You rock girl!
Hugs,
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 10:37:31 PM AEST
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((((((((( Scorpendous ))))))))))
An intersting look into your past. Very cool. A poem with Scorpitude!!!!! Brilliant. Thank you for sharing. Enjoyed this a lot. :)
TIMriffic
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Jen54 on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 11:49:52 PM AEST
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wow i like it a lot. It flowed really well. keep up the great job.
-Jen |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by Willofree on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 07:32:25 PM AEST
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Well the poem describes traits that could be a borderline. The disguising there true inner self and anger that is most always a part of it. To our clinics clients, a borderline had to meet two criteria: (1) they had to be in the system for a long time and resistive to change; and (2) No body wanted to work with that client. :) lol. Really, you seem way too nice to be a borderline. :)
A very fascinating write Scorp
Will |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 02:45:26 PM AEST
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Very very sharp piece!!! It's been so long since i've read any poems and this is a sweet reintroduction. It has the venom of the first few poems you posted on this site a while back.
I love the last stanza as well!! Talk about fire and flame!
Take care Scorp!!
dw |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by secretwind on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 11:56:53 PM AEST
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| excellent flow |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by tonydread on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 01:27:26 AM AEST
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| Strong write....impressive write. so when u help me. i get many offer but make u best. |
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Re: Borderline Behaviour
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 12:30:41 PM AEST
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Wow you are an amazing writer and this was excellent.. I loved it because it reminded me when i had to go see one and it was against my will to do it. I felt every emotion put into this poem.. Great job
christina |
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