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Wandering
Contributed by
highly_flammable
on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 09:47:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Running as fast as I can
With the wind whipping my face
I come upon a room
Where a man will endlessly pace
No stars in the universe
No moon shining bright
Nothing to light my way
On this damnable plight
And here is another
A very large and grand space
With crystals and polished tables
And gold plates at each place
Here I must wander
For sins in my past
Running, flying by rooms
I pray this doesn't last
I come by a hall
A corridor of sorts
Filled with racks and racks
Of only the best tasting ports
I run in inky blackness
Where no light dares shine
I take the curse unwillingly
Into this life of mine
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highly_flammable
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2005-09-21 21:47:25]
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Re: Wandering
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 10:59:52 PM AEST
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Interesting. But, to me anyway, it feels unfinished.
Perhaps a fitting title will materialize if you continue to develop this piece?
Keep it up.
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Re: Wandering
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by gwenevere on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 05:36:41 PM AEST
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| Good poem.I must say I would have been in heaven with the racks and racks of ports.MMM!!!!! |
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Re: Wandering
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by alyssakoren_03 on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 06:45:44 PM AEST
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| I think it is absoultly wonderful!!! I love the last phrase!! Its so great! I LOVE YOU! |
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