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Rain
Contributed by
Tsukasa
on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 08:08:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Rain
She sits at her window
watching the rain fall from the sky
Listening to the thunder crash
as tears pour from her eyes
She waits for the rain now
So she can wander outside
hiding from the others
as she starts to cry
She can't stand life now
Try as she might
It seems she can't last
She'll end this tonight
Her dark room, shadowed
Her floor cold and bare
She's so sure now
That they'll never care
Hoping she'll succeed in her attempt
she slits her wrists and waits quietly
Watching the blood pour
smiling as it bleeds
She sits at her widow
watching the rain fall from the sky
watching the lightning flash
as she slowly starts to die
Copyright ©
Tsukasa
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2005-09-23 20:08:14]
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Re: Rain
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by Jen54 on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 08:18:58 PM AEST
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Be strong!!! This poem reminded me a lot of myself. Dont let others put you down. the only one tht matters is you. Dont try to make the ones around you happy.
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Re: Rain
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by Archie on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 08:51:17 PM AEST
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| I hope you are just writing this and not planning on doing it. I think a lot of people would miss you. |
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Re: Rain
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by WAE on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 09:02:32 PM AEST
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Very deep and well-painted. Emotions are real. I hope you are okay...
Alex |
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Re: Rain
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by brownxeyesxhypnotize on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 12:01:56 AM AEST
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| ur a cutter too huh? its a great escape but its not worth it to do it to yourself. lots of people would miss you and i would miss you because i couldn't read your work anymore. you are probably a great person, and don't let anyone tell you different! find an alternate method of escape, its not worth it to give up the life that could be great. take care!! |
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Re: Rain
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by Caged Soul on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 07:53:00 AM AEST
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Its real hard for me to comment on this type of poetry, as I absolutely love the amount of honest emotion with which it is written, but still I'm a bit uneasy reading it as this may be someones real feelings and I guess I'm afraid that by praising the poem, I would indirectly encouraging someone to take their own live.
Anyway, I do love this piece. There is a powerfull build up to the end and the overall flow of the poem works quite well.
Keep that soul fire burning!
~souLBro~ |
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