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Bled by Love
Contributed by
wachumiri
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Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 05:04:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Love watches over me with care
As I slip down into despair
I cried my tears and bared my heart
Yet still in essence tore apart
No words can calm my spirits scream
Im overcome in Nightmares dream
Shadows streak across my face
As eyes allude to great disgrace
The pain of living fills my soul
As I give back this life I stole
Blood flows free, unchained at last
As crimson stream drowns out my past
My heart weeps tears, a scarlet thread
A sign confirmed, Im truly dead
Though sword or gun might stop my breath
My heart's what's led me to my death
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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2005-09-24 05:04:03]
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Re: Bled by Love
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by maestar on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 09:07:41 AM AEST
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well done. very good.
quite haunted I like it. |
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Re: Bled by Love
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by anitajames on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 08:21:36 PM AEST
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Powerful. Haunting.
The pain of living fills my soul
As I give back this life I stole
This stanza is disturbing and seems to hit a little too close to home.
All my best,
Ann |
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Re: Bled by Love
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 10:32:10 PM AEST
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I like those last lines.
Two good lines! Better than average, so they say.
Andrew |
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Re: Bled by Love
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 05:59:02 AM AEST
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*swooned* lol
Raw emotions, offered ever so fluently.
I, too have been in such states.
This is utterly heart wrenching.
Thank you for sharing, I look forward to more. |
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Re: Bled by Love
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 05:50:30 AM AEST
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Oh...awesome and heart wrenching emotions flowed here in this poem...
Its very much captivating..Venkat
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Re: Bled by Love
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 08:54:03 PM AEST
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A flawless haunting write u have presented us with dearest David. The flow absolutely sensational. You captivate the reader and draw them into reading ur poem word 4 word.
I can relate to ur poem so much. Well done. May ur beautiful heart never weep bloodied tears my friend.
*hugs* from ur fan,
Sue |
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Re: Bled by Love
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th December 2005 @ 10:53:16 AM AEST
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:'(
sad, but the poems full of feeling are always the best. putting your heart into something makes it that much better.
- Beth -
P.S. - you'll be ok... |
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Re: Bled by Love
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 02:07:36 PM AEST
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I find it fabulous that you can write yourself into anothers perspective. I believe it is an important ability of and for a poet, not just to present the world about them in a new and different light to others that don't have the vision, but to be able to be the "voice" for those who can't find the words as well. This earns my respect for that fact alone. The despair captured ... the broken heart, written as if it were you, remarkable.
Nazzy ~ |
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