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Crush This Fate
Contributed by
Vampire_Slander
on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 07:40:31 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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This growing arrangement of fire filled sky
leaves its scorch marks deep into my soul
a temptations not yet dealt with a deed written dark
wind howling in the most morbid tones of life
This earth bleeds in many colors
hatreds assistance is brutal at best
the strings of life clip away each day
only the truly wise will begin an assent
A mountain road to heaven
each step wide and reckless
an everlasting shadow looms on either side
this broken cause never seemed so hard
my redemption has been lost in fire
I shall bare no angle wings
as my last smiles are somewhat human
a winter has positioned in my mind
this struggle has been lost
damnation summons its circle and cage
I am forever lost within
with my final breathe I sing
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2005-09-26 07:40:31]
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Re: Crush This Fate
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by trixxx on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 08:53:39 AM AEST
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cool, i like it
a lot of feeling in this poem
sometimes i get this effect when i lack structure, but i find that i someitmes have to find an equilibrium between structure and feeling
nice work though |
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Re: Crush This Fate
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 05:35:59 PM AEST
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What an awsome write.
I love this part the most
my redemption has been lost in fire
I shall bare no angle wings
as my last smiles are somewhat human
a winter has positioned in my mind
great job on this.
hugs
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