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Loneliness wouldn’t leave me alone
Contributed by
oceandreamer
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Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 05:23:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Dont search for love; for you will not find as what youve been searching for; has been right here, all this time You chose to turn your back; on someone you would not see; but little did you know its always been me. The choice youve made; to leave love behind could catch you tomorrow, or fade with time. Sorry always too late, this one...given to fate. Yesterdays gone; it might just be, too late Your presence still lingers here, in my dreams I see your face. Shadows theyre dark empty spaces and the silence I so much fear; my companion for the night. Loneliness wouldnt leave me alone Visions of youlike salt to my wounds and scars on my heart...a railway that has no end. There is no turning back...as time has moved on, like black on white; its been done. Sorry always too late; this one...given to fate. Yesterdays gone; it might just be, too late
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Re: Loneliness wouldn’t leave me alone
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 06:39:12 PM AEST
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Hmmmm , I would suggest more line breaks in this. It's pretty hard to read, and some won't read it at all, like this, which is a shame because it's a good poem.
A little too repetitve for me, but it still works pretty well. I really like the words.
Great write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Loneliness wouldn’t leave me alone
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by seci on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 06:40:02 PM AEST
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| there are no words to express this poem. all i can say it is beautiful and like something i paint with my paint brush. uh. a beautiful work of art. i like it. i do. |
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Re: Loneliness wouldn’t leave me alone
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by brew on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 11:06:07 PM AEST
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Took the lonliness, and broke it up.took what hurts int heart, and made stand
Sorry this one has choosen differ
We cant make any one LOVE us, yet we can try and see if it works. good write, and straight from what should of been
Brew~
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Re: Loneliness wouldn’t leave me alone
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 12:57:34 AM AEST
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Well written and eloquent, but I too would like to see line breaks instead of ellipses. Ah well.
Keep it up.
Andrew |
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