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A Story Of A Wave
Contributed by
remote
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Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 03:53:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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A wave in an ocean
acquired conciousness
just when he was on the rise
While he was rising
he had wonderful visions
he thought how mighty he was
he was proud of the way he moved
he felt being very special
he loved the way wind felt
and felt as if
he was riding the wind
Then he became aware
of other waves
some mightier than him,
some just a little ripples
He felt less special,
infact felt quite common
he was sad and was breaking apart
Yes he'd seen many joys and some sorrows
All of this lasted but an instant
Down he went and he was a wave no more
What was he?
What was he all the time
before he was a wave?
What would he be after
for eternal time to come?
Just a wave?
A wave that was?
Perhaps he didn't even exist at all!
As soon as he stopped being a wave
he became aware what he really was:
he was a mighty ocean
and all the waves and ripples
were nothing but himself
in all the glorious forms
almost came to believe being
just a wave, soon to be forgotten
Being, not being special,
feeling proud of achievements,
joys and sorrows
heaven and hell
didn't quite mean anything at all.
Just some words invented by waves
to last them that brief moment
they ride the winds.
On the earth
a child was born...
somewhere a star was born...
a galaxy of stars is being born...
Copyright ©
remote
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2005-10-06 15:53:52]
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Re: A Story Of A Wave
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by purplestary on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 04:13:00 PM AEST
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awwwwwwwww...this is beautiful!!!!!! i love this......he was a great big ocean in the end...reading this actually means alot to me....this poem has made me feel better..i was kind of down..i had fallen....but this just made me realize the reason to get back up..
thank you..this is an amazing write. |
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Re: A Story Of A Wave
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by Archie on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 01:59:15 AM AEST
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| As a poem this was good, I know what you are hinting at in your meaning and ask a simple question. "Who or what created the ocean or the stars?" |
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Re: A Story Of A Wave
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by Caged Soul on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 04:04:29 AM AEST
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Like we would say here in SA, "kannie help nie, jy het dit, gebore met dit", which basicly means you rock!
Its beautiful how you used the wave and the ocean to tell a story all of us sometimes have to deal with.
This is the ultimate feel-good poem and was just the thing I needed this early in the morning.
Thanks for sharing this.
~souLBro~ |
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Re: A Story Of A Wave
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by Willofree on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 11:05:34 AM AEST
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I like your use of the wave and ocean as a metaphor. How often is it that we don't realize our own capacity and potential; and our link to our creator, without whom there would be no ocean.
An inspiring write, very thought provoking.
Will |
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Re: A Story Of A Wave
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 05:20:13 PM AEST
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We are those little ripples that will become a big wave some day.. He made us into His own image.... physical, mental, or emotional.
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: A Story Of A Wave
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by ArsenicMyst on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:51:08 PM AEST
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hey remote ...
ive been gone a week so im just trying to catch up ...
i really like this one ...
and oh yes ... i love how you *tread* in the same shores
as if you were a wave ...
but i really love how in the end you delve into
the comparative dimensions of all their relativity ...
really cool!
arsenic`·.¸¸.*
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