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Stars Watch you Weep
Contributed by
wachumiri
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Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:44:43 AM in AEST
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I wish that stars would watch you weep
And stare into your soul
Theyd see a beauty there, in tears
Just longing to be whole
I wish that stars would watch you weep
As teardrops hit the ground
Theyd dry your tears and hold you safe
Until you can be found
If only stars could watch you weep
Just stars, and nothing more
Your soul youd bare to the night air
Its broken to the core
If only stars could watch you weep
Then even they would dive
Theyd fall to earth to hear your tale
To keep your soul alive
I know that stars, they watch you weep
For rain falls from the sky
And with each tear you shed, my friend
The stars join in your cry
The stars my friend, they help you cry
For none alone should weep
So when the rain cascades again
Know stars your sorrows keep
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:49:34 AM AEST
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Uh-oh, melting all over again... :P
Well, I struggled to say anything, anything at all,
earlier, and came up with nothing, but I'll have another
more forceful stab at it.
First, I want to say such a huge thankyou.
We've known each other for.. what, almost three years now, methinks!
Yet, we only got back into contact a week or so ago.
It's great to know that there are such real friendships out there,
and not al of them dissolve into meaningless dust.
Thankyou, thankyou, thankyou!
As for the poem itself, it was incredibly touching..
I loved the flow itself, and the rhyme`n`rhythm.
Thought-provoking, heart-wrenching, (tear-jerking), piece.
Brilliant work!
*Slips in another "thankyou" in here :P*
~KayT
(who is. . . smiling ^^ )
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 01:53:37 PM AEST
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Beautiful write. I reminded me of my own Lighthouse dreamer lost but never forgotten.
Thanks for sharing.
Whisper |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:25:55 PM AEST
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| Excellent stuff here, and the dedication just made the read *that* much better. Hopefully Katie's doing okay day by day, and she must love this. The style of the poem and just the way you wrote it and the concepts you've used were just so well done, with the rain idea standing out to me most of all. That was probably the strongest part of the poem to me. Just great, plain and simple. Katie must be doing backflips, lol. Fantastic. |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by anitajames on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:22:24 PM AEST
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This is beautiful, heartfelt, and full of compassion. What a wonderful gift.
Ann |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:34:02 PM AEST
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Geez...another awesome friendship poem from you! I can't think of a more deserving young lady, to have such a beautifully touching write dedicated to. What more can I say? Your expression, the flow, imagery, feelings...all above par. Great job.
Scorp. |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 01:46:10 AM AEST
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| absolutely beautiful |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Archie on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:51:48 AM AEST
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This is amazing.
I first read one of your poems because of something you said about someone else and I have been inspired ever since.
I think Katie would smile after reading this. |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 01:00:57 PM AEST
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| beautiful write ,I see she loves this ,, and so do I,,Eddy |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Loende on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 03:53:12 AM AEST
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If ever a piece was more heartfelt, I'm not sure I've seen it. It is dedicated to an amazing young lady whom I'm sure, will cherish it and your friendship for all her days. We are lucky to have you here, David, and you make me very proud.
*hugs*
Dawn |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 06:08:09 PM AEST
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David what a beautifully written heart touching write dedicated to such a beautiful girl. A heavenly masterpiece. Your loving compassionate heart shines radiantly through your words. I loved the imagery , the flow, what more can I say?
A talented guy with a heart of gold. May Katie's problems be washed away and may her day's be filled with love and laughter again.
*hugs*
Sue |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Stitch on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 07:27:14 AM AEST
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How wonderful to wake up to the beautiful years and to see the concern behind them. KT is blessed to have such a friend.
Stitch 8) |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 10:11:05 PM AEST
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Wow, David, this is the first time I've ventured to your page, and
I am amazed. This was such a touching and lovely, LOVELY
write. How beautifully you crafted this piece and with such
tenderness for a friend. I am moved.
~Breezy
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by inoc on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 07:58:47 AM AEST
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Oh what a beautiful poem, you did well and thank you for showing us your thoughts of your dear friend....Katie
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by brokenwings on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 03:01:50 PM AEST
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| great write, toching and sweet, |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by ArsenicMyst on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 04:44:08 PM AEST
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*
left speechless by its
beauty and tenderness
*´¨`·.¸¸.*Arsenic
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Crimsonflame on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 10:23:57 AM AEST
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| Beautiful,absolutely beautiful....u made me all warm and fuzzy.....and the poem was dedicated to someone who obviously must be warm to the core from reading this......thanx for sharing,david! Will be waiting for your next masterpiece! |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 10:14:08 PM AEST
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Awwww, David, this is lovely, and I can't think of a nicer person to write about.
(Love ya, Katie!!!)
You wrote everything I wish I could have said.
This is a great write, I especially love that 5th stanza.
*hugs*
Phil xxx
(Who thinks this is very sweet, and hopes Katie knows how blessed she is to have such a good friend) |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st March 2006 @ 06:28:18 PM AEST
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Another excellent post David.
Great R&R coupled with a beautiful message.
J. |
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 11:31:16 PM AEST
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beautiful work.
i especially loved :
"If only stars could watch you weep
Then even they would dive
They’d fall to earth to hear your tale
To keep your soul alive
I know that stars, they watch you weep
For rain falls from the sky
And with each tear you shed, my friend
The stars join in your cry"
such a vivd and powerful imagination you have
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Re: Stars Watch you Weep
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 10th May 2014 @ 11:48:15 AM AEST
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another beautiful poem, and katie, what a
sweet girl, this all shines so, with stars diving to
earth, your poetry is flawless and exquisite, your
talent and creativity soar!
hugs n' love nessa |
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