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Unwitting Time Traveler
Contributed by
jigsma
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Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 08:26:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Unwitting Time Traveler
I'm 80 and I'm lonely
So many gone now.
But wait... 8 Grandkids.
That's a life!
Woke up this morning,
Is it Tuesday?
Has to be...
Daughter was here 2 days ago.
She was such a good baby.
All my children were.
I remember when...
And she didn't even cry!
Knock at the door,
Meals on wheels.
Must be 12:30
Is it Tuesday?
Am I 83 now? I'm lonely
So many gone.
But wait... Is it 7 grandkids?
That's a life.
Woke up this morning,
What year is this?
Saw my sister yesterday,
Must be '85.
Confused...
Calendar has 2003.
Really?
Silly me!
Had 3 children ya' know,
Lost my oldest son,
I miss him so...
Such a shock!
He was such a good baby,
All my children were.
I remember when...
And he didn't even cry!
I'm 70 and I'm lonely.
Lost my husband at 36.
So unfair
Never saw his children grow.
Confused...
I heard I was 85
Really?
Silly me!
Had 3 children, ya' know.
My 2nd son wore glasses at 7 months!
Youngest baby at that time
Got in the newspaper!
He was such a good baby,
All my children were
I remember when...
And he didn't even cry!
Woke up this morning...
Something different?
Focus, look around.
Is it Tuesday?
The coffee pot?
Where did I get this coffee pot?
Oh well, it works.
Silly me!
I'm going to be 65 on my birthday.
Wonder what the kids will do?
Love getting flowers.
I hope they send flowers!
Had 3 children ya' know.
Lost my husband at 36.
So unfair!
Never saw his children grow.
Confused...
I heard I was 87.
Really?
Silly me!
Woke up this morning...
Strangers in my home.
Wait... Am I home?
Who are these people.
I'm getting married next week!
We're going to have 3 children.
Confused...
They say they are my children!
Confused...
Is it Tuesday?
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jigsma
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by inoc on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 09:12:46 AM AEST
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Oh I loved it....
love it ......
and will always love it...
I thank you for submitting this I enjoyed it ALL..........I really enjoyed reading a REALLY great write...expecially on a Tuesday?????
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by OzChick on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 09:40:38 AM AEST
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| This is brilliant! This grought a tear to my eye as I know someone with alzhiemers, you described what it might be like so well. |
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by remote on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 11:26:20 AM AEST
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| Amazing piece of writing, loved it. |
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 01:46:17 PM AEST
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Wow I like this .Really the pic is a bonus. Unfortunately when age sets in some do think and have these same thoughts. Its a good write You have captured that moment which may be inevitably true for all of us one day. Good write.
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:43:08 PM AEST
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Geez...this is me already, and I'm only 28! Great job with this write. A unique concept, yet still relatable in one form or another.
The picture goes perfectly with your poem too.
Very creative! Keep it up : )
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 02:08:12 AM AEST
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jigsma,
This made me cry the first time you had me read. I cried again right now. It is truly a masterpiece and I could not have done better.
Welcome to YPDC, jigsma :)
Now I need to try and find my composure ;-(
Brilliant masterpeice.
Wim
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by Spike on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 12:04:43 AM AEST
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Such a sweet and respectful tribute, and spot on, not only for the forgetfulness and responses to it but the arrangement and recurrent aspects of a dwindling memory. I hope you have some "wrinkly" or "crumbly" (sorry - worked too long in aged care) in mind when you wrote this. If so, show it to them soon...and again....and again.
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by Archie on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 12:19:49 PM AEST
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| I like this poem. It is very sad though but i am fond of the memories in it. |
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Re: Unwitting Time Traveler
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by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 14th March 2019 @ 06:43:54 PM AEST
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Wonderfully written indeed but a very sad subject.
It would have been great to tell you oh about 14 years ago.
( sad respectful tears in my eyes) |
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