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She said ~ He said
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:12:53 PM in AEST
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She said You dont know me
He said Im not afraid to try
She said You cant hold me
He said Can you tell me why?
She said You look to me
Like you might leave
He said Babe, looks
Sometimes deceive.
Gimme a chance and
You might be surprised
He took her hand and fell
Into her life
She said But you promised
He said I did no such thing
She showed him her finger
He said I dont see no ring
She said I knew
From the very start
Youd be the next
To break my heart.
He said I never meant to
Cause you any pain
He closed the door and fell
Into the rain
Leaving was the hardest thing
Hed ever had to do
He hoped someday
She could say
She understood the truth
Its not easy being
So in love
With someone
They can't rise above
The image you have
Painted in your head
( At least thats what he said )
He said You dont know me
She said Im not afraid to try ...
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Re: She said ~ He said
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by xofireangel27 on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:32:49 PM AEST
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very good write. this descibes so much of my life, thanks for posting
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Re: She said ~ He said
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by remote on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:07:51 PM AEST
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| Most people are afraid to know themselves and so hardly know themselves, expecting to know someone else is a bit too much to ask. I guess they may be excused. |
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Re: She said ~ He said
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 08:03:19 PM AEST
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I'm so glad I read this. You put into words something I've wanted to write for the past month or so, and still have yet to properly think of a way to do it. You handled the subject matter so well here, and this is something you should be proud to have written.
*Hopes self has seen a sufficient amount of layers in this one, which self thinks he has*
Excellent write |
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Re: She said ~ He said
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by inoc on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 09:04:28 PM AEST
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the layers are written so cleverly that reading this makes one wonder....
nice work here....
coni |
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Re: She said ~ He said
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 04:05:03 PM AEST
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Naz,
A very creative write; and as complicated as relationships are is reflected in the complexities of this poem. While there are many layers, there does appear to be an overall theme. That theme, I think, relates to how well do people really know each other. So we go by our perceptions of reality which may not be accurate - regarding the significant other or of ourselves. Yes, t he whole issue of transparency/openness.
Well done, my friend
Will/Terry |
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Re: She said ~ He said
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by Archie on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 12:49:32 AM AEST
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| This is good. It shows me what to avoid when i get involved in a relationship. Great write. |
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