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The Silence Inside
Contributed by
Mild_Tempest
on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 04:42:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Skies was made from wine,
The grass from gullible lime.
It was the air that you hugged,
A whisper of a lowly chime.
In a forest of breathing light,
the dirt oozes a brilliant scent.
Leafy guardians loom above,
Where all our time was spent.
So this is how it feels to be alone,
With a heart full of sorrow.
How will the sun shine,
Without you tomorrow.
I see your name in the clouds,
And your face in the pond.
When the sun sets in flames,
My longing for you just dawned.
I want to hold you once again,
Look into your blue eyes.
As a watery rose in my hand,
Slowly withers away and dies.
On a pale spring morning,
The pain hasnt died away.
The sky is blooming red,
My life bleeds another day.
Can I keep this pain inside,
A silent ghost of misery.
Will the guilt wash away,
Or can I ever say Im sorry.
Copyright ©
Mild_Tempest
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2005-10-09 16:42:15]
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by xPixiexDustx on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 04:55:53 PM AEST
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| I love the emotion in this. I dont think you need to change anything, its beautiful the way it is. =) Well done. |
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by O7NeVeS on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 06:59:42 PM AEST
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| definitely a lot of emotion. I enjoyed reading this. I wasn't too crazy bout the beginning but loved the middle to the end! Great job. TD |
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 10:24:32 PM AEST
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how sad this is and yet beautifuly written a lot of stired emotion brought me 2 tears inside
very well done and most effective.
Ben |
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by ArsenicMyst on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 03:25:36 PM AEST
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i just love it
and, the ease of your writing skill
Arsenic`·.¸·:·
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by ChibiMiroku on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 09:53:13 PM AEST
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Aww...that's sad. But a good poem! xD
Hope it gets better......=[ |
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 06:07:31 PM AEST
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*sigh*
aw, a heartfelt and sorrow-filled piece,
wonderfully expressed.
"How will the sun shine,
Without you tomorrow."
Indeed!
Beautiful write, Will.
~Breezy
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Re: The Silence Inside
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by Elisabeth on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 11:10:52 PM AEST
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I thought this was really good, and I also agree with O7NeVeS. Thanks for sharing!
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