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Picturesque
Contributed by
hottennispro88
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Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 07:59:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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A silver stream
Shinning in the darkness
A silver thread
In a sea of needles
Sharp as knives
They point straight up
Calling, calling, calling,
Resist their points
Glinting dangerously
In the morbid darkness
Thread the needles
Make it whole again
Sew a quilt of lies
Just to tear it apart again
Everything happens for a reason
So just flow with it
Drown with it
Just to live again
Pour out your very soul
And watch as it slowly turns black,
Black as the inevitable darkness
That will consume us all
Copyright ©
hottennispro88
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2005-10-10 19:59:29]
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Re: Picturesque
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by Mangos on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 08:05:32 PM AEST
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nice job, i would have liked a stronger ending
good work |
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Re: Picturesque
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by Archie on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 08:07:47 PM AEST
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| What you said is true, unless we drink from the waters of renewal we will all perish in darkness. Start by walking in the light. |
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Re: Picturesque
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by lostrelic on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 10:16:51 PM AEST
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interesting write i like it and it does have a strong ending so keep up the cool work
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Re: Picturesque
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by hoist1atca on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 12:19:37 AM AEST
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Nice-
Often the best things written are inspired by something or someone-
The "spur of the moment" words are the best-
Keep up the good work and I will be reading more from you...
Joe
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Re: Picturesque
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 12:17:00 AM AEST
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Well, I'll just say wow!
Keep it up and thank you for sharing.
Take care,
Tim
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