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Pharisees
Contributed by
Archie
on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 09:23:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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They bound great burdens about men's necks
They turned their lives from bad to wrecks
Useless laws that have loopholes
Love as shallow as the shoals
Unless you become like a child
with mercy great and temper mild
You will never come to know
a love that makes the inner man whole
Some long to hear their own voice sing
they do not see how they're acts sting
biting driving making mad
the ones they should be making glad
They only want to know they're right
inspite of others shedding light
to show their acts are filled with fault
In hinderance they continue wrought
The outside clean and polished bright
the inside full of adder's bites
I wonder if they'll ever learn
before in fires cast to burn
I do not wish these come to harm
but only they might be alarmed
that such thinking is very 'skewed
brothers were not meant to be ruled
Who amongst us says he's great
he must hold the servant's plate
and wash the feet of all below
then his true greatness will show
Love must be the rule we follow
not rules by men which are hollow
All else will be understood
If we live life in love and good.
Copyright ©
Archie
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Re: Pharisees
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 09:55:58 PM AEST
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Indeed. Plenty of truth here for the reader to absorb. The third and the fifth stanza really hit home for me. Then those last two lines sound so positive and reassuring....which is saying alot, coming from me! This serves as a bit of a life lesson. Nicely done!
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Re: Pharisees
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by weepingprophet on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 09:57:24 PM AEST
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I can't say that this styel was a personal favorite of mine but i can say that despite that bias i have you delivered this well.
My favorite part would have to be when you said
"Who amongst us says he's great
he must hold the servant's plate".
good deliverance.
~until i slip, slit my wrist
life ashen in my mouth~weepingprophet
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Re: Pharisees
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 10:19:01 PM AEST
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Archie a great write filled with so much truth. The ending is so positive. So much for us to learn. I love your writes and the style in you write. Well done my dear friend.
*hugs*
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Re: Pharisees
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 11:41:48 PM AEST
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nice write...and on a topic of which i often ponder. it seems we haven't come too far when it comes to this matter.
nice job,
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Re: Pharisees
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 01:13:21 AM AEST
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Great writing, my friend.
good work.
hugs,
emy |
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Re: Pharisees
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 01:55:16 AM AEST
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I agree with scorp in this.
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Re: Pharisees
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by inoc on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 07:53:00 AM AEST
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A clever poem Archie....I dream of writing poems like this ....brilliant
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Re: Pharisees
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by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 11:37:21 AM AEST
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Excellent Archie
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Pharisees
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 03:26:42 AM AEST
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Humble.. definition..
1: not proud or haughty : not arrogant or assertive
2 : reflecting, expressing, or offered in a spirit of deference or submission
Lets just wash some feet and be kind.. Jesus put His feet out first.. to give us an example of kindness.. love.. now He washes ours.. and He did not lie, when He said, He has a place for us.. free..of board.. if we trust, have faith.. He will never go back on His word.. I love His way.. His gentle way.. of helping us to live.. do you know, without Him, the son of God.. no one here would be writing poetry... think about it..
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Re: Pharisees
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by SeanMcHaney on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 02:10:27 AM AEST
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| Very nice! Well written and thought out! |
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Re: Pharisees
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by waos on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 11:38:46 PM AEST
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Good poem, the truth behind it is solid. Some lines seemed to disrupt
the flow a little bit, but overall this was a well written poem.
I enjoyed reading it, and am glad that I stumbled across it.
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