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Worthless Words
Contributed by
Dark_and_Cold
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Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 09:07:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
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To the only person in my life who ever deserved more than I could give...
Worthless Words
I'm so sorry to be writing you this
I never thought we would fall in love
Or that my nights would be filled with tears
And pleading to God above
Im so tired of being heartbroken
Yet this is how I always am
The one person I need is so far beyond my reach
How this happened Ill never understand
Im so sick of living with this emptiness
But its a feeling I can never lose
Ive waited all my life to find you
And now Im unable to choose
Im so afraid of knowing whats right
When its what I cannot do
And I would gladly give up anything
If I didnt have to give up you
Im so unforgivable for putting you though this
But Ive been torturing us both too long
Why cant I be the one who surrenders
And not the one who stands strong
Im so weary of this life
Its always playing with my heart
I should have seen this coming
I should have ended it at the start
Im so stupid for lying
When I said that I loved only you
I couldnt dream of bringing you pain
My punishment was that my lie came true
Im so hopeless for still holding out hope
When reality has crushed all my dreams
Despite my best efforts at self-deception
This situation is just as bad as it seems
Im so numb as I lay here
Thinking of my life without you
This would be so much easier
If I didnt adore everything about you
Im so angry for fooling myself
Into thinking that somehow everything would be fine
I know there is no way that this can ever work
And I realize that the fault is all mine
Im so miserable knowing that even if we endure the trials
That we cant be truly together
When you dont share the most important part of my life
And eventually Ill lose you forever
And Im so sorry that you ever loved me
But I can never regret loving you
And if even it means that my heart is broken forever
I know finally what I have to do.
I love you
Goodbye
Copyright ©
Dark_and_Cold
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2005-10-14 21:07:58]
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Re: Worthless Words
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by brew on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 09:12:36 PM AEST
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MAN, Brandin..................Go get her..................What a write, with such emotions, and with all the heart.! YES, you can write..you have put such feelings,on paper, and then penned so well,and YOU cant see, it.! WHY?
If, you love, as much as you have proclaimed.the make the stake.! ACk..........Well, this was wonderful.....
Brew~ |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 09:16:40 PM AEST
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impressive poem and perhaps the best title that could be given to this piece. i liked the profressionalism in this also. the ending did irk me though, because the last line, "Goodbye" seemed so distant from the rest of the piece, even though it fit in concept wise. i think it was placed without any effective transition, and was too sudden and hard hitting to fit with the rest of the piece for that reason. though that shift works both ways, it just worked that way for me. hopefully you have enough soul left to write of other things, but if not at least you have this to your name.
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Re: Worthless Words
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 09:33:26 PM AEST
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| The ending was a bit different, but there's a good reason, I wrote this for her, it was the only way I could stand to say goodbye to her... |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by LittleMissWonderful on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 11:21:34 PM AEST
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I know you only wanted me to post critiques on your poems, but yeah... I can't help doing so with a bit of my own personal feelings.
Brandin, I love this poem like I love every poem you've ever shown me. I just want you to know that those words are not worthless in the slightest bit. I cried when I read them. I know you wrote it months ago, but it still applies to today for us... I just want you to know that I'm not willing to give up before we start. Thank you for another beautiful poem love... It's one of my favorites. I think that you did exactly what you always complain that you can't do; put emotion in it. You did. Keep writing... I can't wait to read your next poem. |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by Archie on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 12:29:46 AM AEST
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| This is very good. I am reminded of a song by the "Manhattens" which i will not quote; "Let's just kiss and say good bye" This is a very worthy write. |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 03:50:25 AM AEST
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Words of Love are never worthless.
Understood or not, reciprocated or not, they always have infinite value.
A very sensitive, tender and delicately penned poem.
Thanks Brandi for sharing it with us.
Elizabeth |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 01:22:49 PM AEST
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I'm kind of scared to comment, it's a beautiful poem, amazing, heartfelt, you can tell you put your heart into it, but I'm not exactly sure I get the meaning, but it seems your trying to protect her, or yourself, I may be completely off base, but if your hiding, trying to protect either you or her, in the long run you'll just hurt the both of you. I know it seems difficult sometimes, to bear your heart and soul to the one you love, but you shouldn't be afraid, because in the end, you'll just suffer. Again lol sorry if I'm way off base, but I loved the poem.
- Cassy |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by djs on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 01:33:46 PM AEST
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| i love the lines "i would gladly give up anything if i didn't have to give up you." those are some very powerful words. awesome. |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by xPixiexDustx on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 07:03:50 PM AEST
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| Wow.. so sad =( I got chillls. Hmm you did such a great job I'm actually speechless. Beautifully done, so much emotion. Brilliant. |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by mjh0813 on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 09:11:30 AM AEST
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damn, if you love her go and get her. i loved the part bout giving ne thing up cept her. i love this write.
peace and love meghann hubeny |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 03:12:53 AM AEST
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full of emotion and feeling. You seem to love her so much dont let her go you may regret it forever go after her!
Michelle |
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Re: Worthless Words
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 10:23:54 PM AEST
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extreamly long, cut some stanzas down, get to the point and go with it, Dont lag on with pointless stanzas, it kills the intrest. you did have some really good lines though.
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Re: Worthless Words
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 09:31:15 PM AEST
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omg...i love this poem. its just so awesome. i loved the rhyme scheme and it seems as if you did pour out part of your soul out with this poem cause it really shows. Great work.
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