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Untitled Song
Contributed by
MrWrite
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Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 08:54:22 PM in AEST
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VERSE I:
My heart is pounding, my mind is racing
The more is my unrest
The lights are blinding, my hands are shaky
All I want is rest
VERSE II:
She isn't with me, the pain it fills me
The void in me has grown
I feel divided, the sole survivor
And I am all alone
CHORUS:
I'm falling apart
And there's nothing more that I can do
It's breaking my heart
My soul's becoming cracked and bruised
What can I do
VERSE III:
The world is turning, I keep on hurting
I'm alone in my misery
The gods have cursed me, my life is burning
I guess that it was meant to be
CHORUS:
I'm falling apart
And there's nothing more that I can do
It's breaking my heart
My soul's becoming cracked and bruised
What can I do
INSTRUMENTAL BREAK
CHORUS:
I'm falling apart
And there's nothing more that I can do
It's breaking my heart
My soul's becoming cracked and bruised
What can I do
FADE OUT
Copyright ©
MrWrite
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2005-10-16 20:54:22]
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Re: Untitled Song
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by Archie on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 09:10:33 PM AEST
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| I think this is good from a poem standpoint. As a song it is missing a hook but i think the instrumental break can compensate for that. (That is a non professional opinion anyway) |
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Re: Untitled Song
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by matts_sweetie_04 on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 09:20:49 PM AEST
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| i really liked it. I know a lot of people can relate to it. I can. Even though I am happy right now the pain is still there deep inside and it comes out the very second I am alone without something to keep my ocupied. |
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Re: Untitled Song
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by shelby on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 09:29:20 PM AEST
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I like this as a poem. I feel it would make a great song. I dont have the talent to put my words to music ( dang it) i can play and I write but the two never come together! You have a great talent when you can put them altogether would love to hear it sometime!
Michelle |
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Re: Untitled Song
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by crazy on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 09:34:26 PM AEST
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| this would make a good song and i know how much it hurts loved it nice write |
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Re: Untitled Song
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by djs on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 10:26:02 PM AEST
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| it's good. i just wish i could hear the music with it. but even without the music, i really enjoyed it! |
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Re: Untitled Song
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by brokenwings on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 02:29:50 AM AEST
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| good poem, would make an even better song. |
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Re: Untitled Song
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by Gothchyk on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 10:20:35 PM AEST
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| this is great, i would love to hear the music you set it to, amazing write!! |
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