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confused
Contributed by
crazy
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Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 09:21:58 PM in AEST
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confused
i dont know what to do
imnot here
no one see's me
all confused
why am i never good enough
i try and try
still i'll never do anything good enough
i hate you
i wish you would die
im so confused
i spilled my guts out to you
yet you riped my soul
to shreads
with all the lies
confused
of my memories
memories where you told me you loved me
im confused because all i feel for you is just hate
i feel like im in a crate
no one will open the gate
the gate to my soul
because its just a hole
confused
is there really a heaven or hell
ill never tell if there is
no such thing as heaven
theres only hell
all bloody with fire and death
confused
if i live in hell
or is it just life?
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Re: confused
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by shelby on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 09:26:16 PM AEST
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I think the style and scheme of your poem reflected well within the confines of your title and the feeling of being confused. I like this very emotion and honest
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Re: confused
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by Zee on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 01:48:38 AM AEST
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Everything's looks confused! the title explains your write very well, flow doesnt matter. good write!
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Re: confused
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 06:22:47 AM AEST
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Each poet has a unique style of writing. I think you've done well with the way you've presented your poem. Frustration and confusion can be a source of ones hell.
Good job. Keep penning.
*hugs*
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Re: confused
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 09:07:49 AM AEST
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| I thought it read really well , you heart poured out,,I liked it I really did,,my hats off,,Eddy |
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Re: confused
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by cryingonmyporch on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 02:07:35 PM AEST
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We all live in our own personal hell I think. There might be heaven after death or something that makes life seem to have been easier. Needless to say life,death it's all the same confusion mess I believe. You live a life to only know that death will one day be waiting at our door. Go figure. Now that has some Irony to it. I love your poem it is fabulous.
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Re: confused
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 02:35:10 PM AEST
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I agree with whatever kenty said .
well done |
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Re: confused
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by romance_pyro on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 01:25:29 AM AEST
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| I really like the poem. The hell you have gone through and the hell your will go through is hard but you always got friends to rely on. Fab-O-Las. Fine |
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