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On a page inside a spiral notebook
Contributed by
AshRayne
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Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 09:44:17 PM in AEST
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On a page inside a spiral notebook,
My worst fears were hidden,
My dark desires kept secret,
My melancholy trapped.
On a page inside a spiral notebook,
Lay peices of my heart.
Hidden messages awaken,
The fire burns inside.
The mystery of my noctum,
The key to my prison,
Lies burried in the sea.
On a page inside a spiral notebook.
Copyright ©
AshRayne
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2005-10-19 21:44:17]
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Re: On a page inside a spiral notebook
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by trini on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 10:08:28 PM AEST
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aww, i really liked that. you could expand on it more. make it a bit longer, but overall, very good poem. i look forward to seeing more. keep it up
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Re: On a page inside a spiral notebook
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 02:03:44 AM AEST
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| Loved the poem, great job! |
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Re: On a page inside a spiral notebook
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 11:57:43 AM AEST
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It certainly speaks lovely here very nice writting along with deep feelings.
Ben |
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Re: On a page inside a spiral notebook
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 04:09:28 PM AEST
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| My spiral notebook (journal) was stolen...maybe i should write a poem about that. Well I agree that you could make it a bit (quite a bit) longer, but nonetheless tis good...doesn't have to be long to be good! |
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