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Melancholy in a Word
Contributed by
Unbreakable
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Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 09:29:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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A face without expression
An existence void of soul
A smile empty of happiness
A life that knows no goal
An ache that makes you turn away
A love that couldn't be
A laughter lost without a voice
A truth that none can see
A touch that does not linger
A kiss you wished away
A heart fractured by circumstance
A prayer you'll never pray
A day that ends the rest of time
A dusk that never falls
An empty stare that penetrates
A plague behind your walls
A faith in nothing through your eyes
A dream that no one dreamed
A sacrifice you couldn't make
An insincerity it seemed
A lie that makes the world go round
A word you never said
A scar that did not heal in time
A tear I never shed
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Unbreakable
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2005-10-23 09:29:30]
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Re: Melancholy in a Word
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 11:46:26 AM AEST
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I'm surprised that this isn't getting more attention, Unbreakable. The title pulled me right in and what I found on page was well presented and poignant. Perhaps it's a bit early and others will discover this in time, but if they do not --- it's certainly a lost opportunity.
I enjoyed this very much and found much here that was relatable. You've done well here... this, I think, is the sort of write that difficult (painful, I mean) to put on the page. Excellent write!
Thinking I'll probably be checking out more of your work,
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Re: Melancholy in a Word
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by Gothchyk on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 02:03:51 PM AEST
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| i agree w/ silent_no_more, this is definately a lost opertunity if ppl don't take a look at it, amazing write, great job. |
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Re: Melancholy in a Word
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by DreamPoetess on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 04:23:28 PM AEST
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It starts out nothing, which I just posted one, absolute, who pays attention to the attentive, only we who grieve, and yes, it is hard to cry alone, and when someone comes around, you bawl like a baby, and then, apologize? :> Wicked isn't it. I realize reality, it sucks, it hurts, hang in there, each moment passes into a new:>
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Re: Melancholy in a Word
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by JanMac on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 09:04:28 PM AEST
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I thought it was great and moving. I try to read all the poems here but it's hard. This one is one of my faves!
Jan |
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Re: Melancholy in a Word
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 06:55:45 PM AEST
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| I really loved the ending. That's not saying much though, because I just loved this thing in it's entirety. So many lines stand out, they each held a lot of meaning, and your attention to rhyme doesn't show too many signs of being forced. Always fun to read stuff like this, it was just soo good. The style was also very notable, as the repetition added something I can't put my finger on, but it just made it better. |
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