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The Morning After
Contributed by
Opium
on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 12:28:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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It all started the first day we met
And since that day my eyes never slept
Gazing upon your face in the sunset
Sparkling beauty through the tears I wept
The years kept passing by
I was never able to say
What caused my desperate sigh
And the pain in which I lay
Thousands of poems I wrote
Millions of speeches I planned
Not a word was able to float
And reach your heart of sand
Today is just another day
That I wear my mask of laughter
Next to you I will forever stay
Wishing you could love me the morning after
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Re: The Morning After
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by Dri on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 05:13:16 PM AEST
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| that last stanza is pretty good, but i don't know if the rest does it for me. in any case, a pretty average write. |
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Re: The Morning After
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 12:08:41 PM AEST
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Very nice!! The rhyme in the first stanza was
a bit touchy but then it just got better and
better. My favourite stanza was the third by
far!!
Thousands of poems i wrote
Millions of speeches planned
Not a word was able to float
and reach your heart of sand.
Well put together, keep up the fine writing! |
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