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Winter's Frost
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 08:02:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
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She grew as summer, looking for spring
Spent her life, soul searching,
Found her love in a fairy tale,
She never knew, it was doomed to fail.
In stillness and in retrospect
She desperately tries to recollect
A time when love was not so bleak
And her gentle heart did not weep.
But thinking is an enemy,
One which attacks, frequently,
To tell her that she is alone,
And it is her fault, that he is gone
Secretly she held steadfast,
To a reverie that could not last,
For a dream of love that is not shared,
Is one that drifts into despair ,
And so she lingers in the past,
Reaching for something, beyond her grasp,
A memory, though not yet real,
In which her heart, has yet to feel.
His essence remains a mystery,
A dreamlike invented destiny,
And only now she feels the loss,
Her heart, the bearer of winter's frost.
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by xxbreathlessx on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 08:46:31 PM AEST
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| you guys did a great job! her misery is vivid and it ended nicely. |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by brew on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 09:47:05 PM AEST
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All twined to make the one.......Yes.....great write, felt by two yet made for one! Loved it.! Sorry not as critical as Mister.Jarred........Cant be , I had a mom as an English teacher, and HATES to be critical to anyone..............LOL!
I was a NERD..............................*shakes head*
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 12:31:10 AM AEST
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Two fabulous poetesses combined in one write ? I had to stop here for a few read throughs and each one was better than the rest. Fabulous endeavor ladies. I really enjoyed this.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 12:48:52 AM AEST
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wow this is very amazing I really enjoyed this its very expressive and powerful beautifully down
JENNITTUDE |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 02:18:43 AM AEST
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A wonderful colabortaion Ladies.
His essence remains a mystery,
A dreamlike invented destiny,
And only now she feels the loss,
Her heart, the bearer of winter's frost.
My favorite part of the poem, beautiful stuff.
Jane~ |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 05:24:18 AM AEST
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*nods*
I much enjoyed viewing this creamy, light piece.
Ever so whispy in texture...floating along a poetic storyline.
Some beautiful analogies in combination with vivid imagery.
thank you for sharing and congratulations to both, on completing such a stimulating piece. |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by GurlyTye on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 12:19:26 PM AEST
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| i really enjoyed this... |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 12:22:23 PM AEST
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I enjoy collabs that blend the writers well.
This one definately fits that!
The flow and the rhyme scheme are plesant throughout, nice job you two!!!!!!! |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 06:27:20 PM AEST
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A brilliant piece of poetry written by two talented poestess's. Hats off to u two on such a wonderful job. An outstanding joint effort. Well done.
*hugs*
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 06:35:36 PM AEST
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Just wanted to pop in and say thanks everybody so
much reading and the hearfelt comments. And thanks
to you Philly for the idea and the inspiration you always
give me! It was awesome working on this with you!
Je t'aime mon amie! Tu êtes magnifique!!
~Breezy |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 07:03:22 PM AEST
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Nice job guys. I rarely like poems in this particular vein, but this one was well written.
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Baronhawk on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:48:54 PM AEST
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There is a thread in many tales that echoes such as this. But in yours it does entail a certain connection to unfounded bliss. I for one find this indeed touching, for in its telling nothing else perhaps echoes such reflections as your mention of winter's frost. An apt description perhaps, for those lost within their mental palaces. Those who live within the trappings of the past, within the echoes of what was and might have beens.
"...to bear the tidings of a winter's frost...for a heart is perhaps the greatest of loss..."
Kudos ladies!
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 05:18:04 PM AEST
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I'lL add my kudos to the others! It gives the impression of the mysterious and ethereal (there's that word again) quality of the one loved. Anyway, I have nothing to add and don't take away a thing. It's a great write!
Blessings, J.
(Ps. Philly, I've noticed you've been writing a lot more the last couple of months and that is fantabulous! *hugs* |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 05:51:50 PM AEST
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Well here's a pleasant surprise...Two wonderful poets coming together, and producing a lovely piece of poetry. I enjoyed this read, and the flow was seamless. Good job you two!
Scorp. |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by WAE on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 04:12:40 PM AEST
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| Very beautiful... |
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 3rd November 2005 @ 05:42:58 PM AEST
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Excellent piece, ladies. This is very polished and graceful.
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Re: Winter's Frost
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 03:16:26 PM AEST
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My yes, how I can relate "But thinking is an enemy".
A brilliant and incredible write. You and Breezy make an awesome team.
More more! :-)
Tim |
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